Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age.
it is argued that adults should be financially free and liable and it comes from to learn how to manage money at a young age. In my opinion, I believe that children ought to be educated about controlling money, in particular in terms of liability and living comfortably.
On the one hand, liability is maybe, one of the most important values in financial responsibility. liability is a duty of being responsible for something. Thanks to having this duty, one can control spending money by thinking someone, including education, without any loss. For example, there should be added some courses about money control at a young age students' schedules of lessons. it is a well-known fact that early age educations are the most effective one in the childhood period. With these exceptional lessons, children understand that what will be their future liabilities when they grow up. As a result, these characteristics will help children to get an idea about being a responsible adult in financial issues.
In addition to liability, living comfortably is another noteworthy reason. living comfortably is living without depending on someone and feeling financially free. Owing to having this, children can be aware of spending money is a crucial situation as much as earning money. young people need to understand consequences if they do not save enough. So, responsible adults have to meet their kids' needs. they have to provide a better life with the types of equipment of health, education, food, etc. All these are a combination of learning how to handle money at a young age. As a consequence, financial issues can not be skipped for children.
In a nutshell, when all these specific reasons and relevant examples are considered and evaluated, it can be concluded that becoming financially responsible adults, children should get the idea of controlling money at a young age.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, so, well, for example, in addition, in particular, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1580.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 307.0 407.700716846 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14657980456 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95824657942 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 212.727598566 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.540716612378 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.5295248306 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7777777778 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0555555556 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.45110844103 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299264696153 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.093618480943 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0787731847058 0.0737576698707 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213826919881 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0384323460778 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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