Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment--doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Although all technological change have been interest for humanity, we have realized many important transformations on people behavior that were disgusting. Honestly, I accept the idea that everyone needs his personal happiness and can also enjoy life. However, we are facing a huge bad change which is making us poor human beings.
First, if we look back to our past generations, it is easy to figure out how our grandparents worked hard to achive their golas. Despite the idea that they did not have many technology to entertain them, they put their work in first place. In the other hand, nowadays society prefers to spend time with Facebook, Instagram, or TikTok, which are not worth enough for them and their families. Fortunately, because old people thought the importance to make money for their next generation, they worked hard every day and does not matter what they needed to do, they were focused. As some eldery say until today, their commitment with their job had a great importance, bigger than any social distraction.
Second, related to of our family, we are living a different way of life. Of course, it is health to have some time just for ourselves, when we can enjoy our friends and take away all stress with job and problems. Nevertheless, nothing can be more important than our family and we have to be present, take care, and protect them. Unfortunately, every day we know a different situation where parents prefer to leave their siblings with a relative just to enjoy their private life. Showing an unreal appearence, people are living a fake life and forgetting about their biggest treasure - the family.
To conclude, I am sure that people are doing things they prefer, instead of do what is important. Furthermore, they forget the importance of a good job and the great times with their families, just to show a false appearence for the society.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, honestly, however, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1564.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 318.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91823899371 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65415257642 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610062893082 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.7779933657 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.266666667 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.192929648026 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681778501144 0.076458572812 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.1003458279 0.0737576698707 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138983484092 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.116013707999 0.0645574589148 180% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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