In recent years, how people manage and allot time to different daily tasks has shifted dramatically along with the dizzying development speed of society. From my point of view, modern humans now tend to focus more on their personal preference than to social expectations and responsibilities.
The decrease of priority put on important things can be blamed on mobile devices and social media. It is widely acknowledged nowadays that our phone and social media can be more addictive than we can expect. As social networking apps keep being updated to engage more audience, for a longer period of screen time, people seem to inevitably get trapped in the virtual world. As a result, social media users, who make up around 85% of the world population, tend to put off the tasks they know they should be doing and procrastinate until it is not too late. They end up spending a lot of time scrolling on their devices, indicating they prioritize their personal recreation over responsibilities. This phenomenon has become so prevalent that every citizen on the globe says they can relate a lot to it.
On the other hand, it can be considered a human nature that we enjoy doing things which stimulate our dopamine and avoid more challenging tasks such as doing homework or saving the whales. There is no doubt simple things according to our personal liking not only feels much more comfortable doing but also rewards us with happy hormones that encourage us to repeat the action. On the contrary, hard tasks that we are supposed to complete require more will power and motivation. For example, we tend to leave our household chores until we feel like it's time to start doing and spend the meantime on more entertaining activities such as watching TV or hanging out.
In conclusion, after centuries of evolution and decade of social development, I feel that today's people tend to spend more time on doing what they enjoy than they did in the past. Of course, some duties are inevitable, yet they don't seem as important as before, especially when it comes to choosing between personal enjoyment and responsibility.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 229, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e, some duties are inevitable, yet they dont seem as important as before, especially...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, i feel, in conclusion, no doubt, of course, such as, as a result, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1758.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9243697479 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75555944072 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585434173669 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 33.2762862184 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.571428571 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.6045352989 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 5.45110844103 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293311096532 0.236089414692 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0962551590086 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814255346114 0.0737576698707 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173822638067 0.150856017488 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073222214136 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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