Some people prefer to take a position in a company and work for the company Other people think it is better to go into business for themselves Which do you think is better | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

Essay topics:

Some people prefer to take a position in a company and work for the company. Other people think it is better to go into business for themselves. Which do you think is better?

When people have to decide about their professional lives, they always have a difficult decision to take. Some people prefer to open their own business, because they believe it is the best way to make more money. However, I am sure that is better to be part of a company.

First, when we are in a group of workers, we can rather do a better job than alone. Usually, employees who put their efforts together and are pushing themselves, have a great result in the end of their projects. Because they can discuss their ideas, it is easier and more productive to take the best choice. Additionally, in a company with a good relationship between employees, we always have someone to help us. In my experience as a veterinarian, sometimes we have different emergencies to do, in places very far from each other. Due to a friendly group, I know that I can share my demand with others and they will be happy to help me.

Secondly, working in a company, we have all support to achieve our necessities. Work material, clothes, and cars are different examples of things that a company can provide to their employees, making their job easier and better. Previously, I used to work alone in Brazil. It was a good experience, but I had some hard times to do my job and also all the labor necessary to make the company working, such as buy materials, pay bills, and contact clients to solve problems. Furthermore, the feeling that clients have when they have been customers of a company, instead of a person, is extremly better.

To conclude, I would say that the most important thing is to work hard and provide satisfaction for our clientes. Although some people like to do it by themselves, I am sure that have been part of a company made my professional life easier and more profitable. Consequently, I am sure that I did a good professional change in the past, and now my goal is to make the company where I work stronger.

Votes

Essay Categories

Independent TOEFL Writing

Comments

Essay evaluations by e-grader

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
When people have to decide about their p...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...t is better to be part of a company. First, when we are in a group of workers...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s and they will be happy to help me. Secondly, working in a company, we have ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ead of a person, is extremly better. To conclude, I would say that the most i...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 344.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58720930233 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75926459465 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508720930233 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2769566122 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.8235294118 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2352941176 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196622509028 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0622253541176 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0339678899924 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127615983665 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308383307877 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------
We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.