People learn things better from those at their own level - such as fellow students or co-workers - than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
People have different methods to learn during their lives. When we are newborns, our learnings came from our direct contact with our parents. This natural human behavior forces me to believe that we were designed to get information from others who are in a higher level of knowledge. However, some people think that a good intelectual development comes from a relationship with other at the same level.
First, all my previous experiences with my mother and father were very important for my adult life. Even when I did not agree with my parents orientation, they were the best choice for me. This is what a true love between relatives can provide us. But, I can understand that some experiences with friends during my childhood were important to get good directions in my life. However, a experienced people, who lived the same problems or doubts that we are living, such as teachers, have a great chance to find a better solution. Furthermore, if we learn things from older or experient people our chances to achieve a great result may improve. That is why I always believe on my parents advices to achieve success.
Second, when we begin our professional life, a lot of doubts come to challenge us. Every day we have to solve a new problem and, sometimes, we were not prepared for it during our education. Although we always have helpful co-workers, sometimes they do not have the same level of experience that a supervisor has. Due to many problems solved by my boss, I really believe that he can help me better and with an easier way to understand. Consequently, I prefer to share my professional challenges with him than with a co-worker.
To conclude, nothing can be more important than experience when we are learning something from someone. Even if many people believe that we learn more when we are changing ideas with someone who is in the same level of us, I prefer to listen a person with better knowledge or more life experience. Maybe, in the future, we can recognize the importance of those people and, at that time, companies would not change their old employees for a newer one.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, second, so, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 52.1666666667 88% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1741.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7698630137 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68876438747 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.534246575342 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7881619683 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6315789474 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.42105263158 5.45110844103 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190818100263 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614037504664 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566806278112 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129647802711 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0673932860371 0.0645574589148 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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