Some people believe that video games could inspire young students' interest and make their study more efficient rather than distract them and be a waste of time, so young students should be allowed to play video games.Do you agree or disagree?
technological advantages have changed the world dramatically. The last century showed us a great development on video games and other devices as well. some people belive that this kind of improvment is benefitial for children or teenagers, due to an increase in their capacity of thinking faster and better knowledge. However, I do not agree that youths will be better at school, if they are using computers, video games, or smartphones all day long.
First, we need to prepare our children for the future. And when we think about their next steps, we are talking about their necessity to be ready for their jobs. people have to understand that every effort that they can do today, will be reflected in their children’s future. So, let them spend a lot of hours in front of a TV, is wasting of time. For this reason, we should explain to our siblings the importance of manage time. In a few years, bosses will be asking them to have everything done not for tomorrow, but for now. Absolutely, video games will not help them with this kind of challenge.
Second, most of the games that we have today are not related to study subjects. even if we know some games on which strategy is the main idea, where gamers have to conquist lands, countries, or other planets, most of them do not have this interesting approach. Honestly, I believe that game companies make more money with sports or fight games. Consequently, it is not worth for the developer to create anything different from that.
Finally, we are realizing some teenagers facing problems with their behavior inside home. While they are playing for hours, some of them do not even have something to drink and eat. Also, we had seen an opposite situation where children are getting fat because they stay all day long seated in front of a screen. Furthermore, we had some violent situations at schools around the country, based on video games experience.
To conclude, I trustly disagree with the idea to let children have contact with games for a long time. I believe that we need to balance technological development with physical abilities such as, play soccer, basketball, or baseball.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, honestly, however, if, second, so, well, while, kind of, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1790.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85094850949 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61046376051 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555555555556 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.4786037545 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 85.2380952381 100.406767564 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5714285714 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235097347596 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.07164144853 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435275460125 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132054488477 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324581789335 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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