Some people believe that video games could inspire young students' interest and make their study more efficient rather than distract them and be a waste of time, so young students should be allowed to play video games.
Entertainment has a deep root in human kind’s personality that goes way back to thousands of years ago in history. Nowadays, one of the most common forms of entertainment, especially for teenagers, is playing video games. Many parents and teachers are terrified of how video games are ruining students’ lives, and claim that their detrimental effects are irreversible. However, I, as someone who used to play video games more than five or six hours a day at some points in my life, believe that it can be very beneficial for students.
First, these games satisfy the interest teenagers have in heroism. Many novels and books that we used to read in school were tales of heroism; how a prince saved a princess, or the story of a lover who carved a love poem in to win the heart of his beloved. While these stories are lovely to hear, they cannot engross the audience, or at least the new generation audience. I think the main reason is that we- the new generation- are accustomed to having an impact on the story. I mean, books follow a certain line and the audience just passively listens to the story. Conversely, video games are interactive and the player, which is called the audience in the case of stories, can actively influence the actions of the hero. This will give the player a chance to imagine themselves as real heroes, and their actions will have consequences in the game. So, they have to devise every move carefully. I think these games are more educational than other sources of entertainment, and they are helpful toward developing a good character in teenagers.
Second, these games can boost students’ creative thinking and puzzle solving abilities. Most games require the player to show a good amount of dexterity, and they face many a puzzle during the gameplay. Puzzle solving and abstract thinking, as a result, would be necessary to develop should the player want to progress at the game. Let us step back for a moment and wonder what the goal of education was . Yes! Teaching creative thinking and riddle solving, so I think it is only appropriate to say mission accomplished! According to the line of thought I explained, playing video games, teenagers not only spend their time doing something they truly enjoy but also develop great skills of puzzle solving.
As a personal experience, when I was a kid(,) I used to play a lot on my Playstation1. There was a game that did not have audio, and the characters’ conversations appeared as text on the screen, so I had to read everything to be able to decipher the quests of the game. This game alone improved my English skills and vocabulary more than months of English courses. Another game I used to enjoy was called Silent Hill which was scary and contained extremely hard
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All in all, considering my bright resume in playing video games and the reasons I provided, I do not see any reason to think that video games are a waste of time and should be avoided. I believe that they are necessary for the development of the brain in teenage years, a period where young ones long for excitement and recreational activities. Video games should be viewed as great opportunities to provide helpful, fun material for young students.
By: Mansour
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, however, if, second, so, while, at least, i mean, i think, as a result, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2944.0 1977.66487455 149% => OK
No of words: 608.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84210526316 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.9656475924 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76956932789 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 320.0 212.727598566 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 920.7 618.680645161 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.6271540933 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.037037037 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5185185185 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.53405017921 198% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 21.0 11.8709677419 177% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259472601633 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0620010227155 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0627496997918 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882425090163 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0926263587183 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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