One of the huge concerns of modern societies which arises many debates, is video game. There is a discussion about whether video games prevent the students to concentrate on their education goals or they are actually inspirational for them to study more efficient. As far as I’m concerned, among a plentitude reasons against of this assertion, lack of social skills and ceasing physical activities could be picked up for further analysis.
To begin with, the first exquisite point to mention is that the children may not become socialized properly owing to loneliness that arises from video games. Most of parents report that their students are always working with their cellphones and when a group activity comes out, they panic and feel uncomfortable. From my vantage point, this behavior has a strong correlation with the fact that the kids didn’t learn how to interact with real people because they were playing on the internet most of the time.
Another point that deserves some words is that video games can lead to a lot of physical damages such as arthritis, back ache and etc. There are a lot of benefits in childhood plays such as football game which include mobility. Young people who have modern lifestyle, barely spend enough time to move and exercise and it definitely results in weak muscles. Whoever has not strong body, is vulnerable to somatic diseases.
In conclusion, from my perspective, video games not only do not help students to focus on their educational proposes, but also can contribute in serious problems such as preventing social skills to improve among users and causing painful illnesses.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 159, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the parents') or simply say ''Most parents''.
Suggestion: Most of the parents; Most parents
...oneliness that arises from video games. Most of parents report that their students are always w...
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Line 5, column 127, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...al damages such as arthritis, back ache and etc. There are a lot of benefits in childhoo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1375.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 268.0 407.700716846 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13059701493 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64247345516 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.64552238806 0.524837075471 123% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 618.680645161 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.6693236676 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.0 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3636363636 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251044173469 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797329475977 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0497123830825 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134956668791 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431172074539 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 10.9000537634 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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