Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion
It is undeniable that family has an important role in everybody’s life in each society. However, its role may be changed in our life when we became adolescence based on our attitude. Some people leave their parent’s home as soon as they are able to do that. In contrary, others stay with their family in the same home for a longer time. As far as I am concerned, I think everyone should become independent as early as possible. Among plentitude reasons in support of this idea, getting responsible in many aspects and helping parents to save money could be picked up for further analysis.
The first exquisite point to mention is that independence helps youth to learn how to be responsible for their life and the sooner it happens, the better result will come out. Until the age of eighteen, the parent has obviated almost all of the children’s needs such as food, place to live, etc. The new experience of being alone results in the obligation to be capable to manage the finance. In this way, hey not only become skilled in the area of gaining and spending money but also they will acquire how to plan for their lifestyle in detail. My personal experience is a proof of that. When I entered the university, I was supposed to live in the dorm. Although it was really tough for me, I learned a lot. I realized how to have a plan for each part of my daily life.
Another reason which deserves some word is that if children separate from their parent, it can be beneficial for both themselves and their parents. This is because they don’t have to provide everything for them anymore. For instance, I my sister worked in order to gain money for her tuition. My father was so happy because of her, due to the fact that in this way she could help the family to not be forced to pay extra money for her education.
To wrap it up, there is a debate about whether it is good for young people to detach from their families as soon as possible or not. From my vantage point, the sooner the youth start living alone, the more responsible they will be. Moreover, if a family is in a shortage of money, it is good for it to encourage the child to leave home and start going through a new pathway earlier.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, for instance, i think, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1819.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 405.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.49135802469 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48604634366 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53785844742 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558024691358 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 588.6 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6189008276 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.619047619 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239468212293 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0695332962311 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697296126388 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14965327165 0.150856017488 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0422816086386 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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