Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think better? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.
I support that kind of young adults who want independence from their parents as soon as possible. I support this statement for many several reasons.
Firstly, getting independence from their parents at an early age makes him/her more independent. Then he/she will have to take their all decision by their own. They can follow their passion without any restriction. For example, when i was in college, i have a great interest in music and photography. On the other hand, my parent's wants me to only focus in my study. They didn't provide any kind of support to follow my passion. For this reason, i was not only just mentally broke down but also i couldn't concentrate on my study. I will give an another example of my friend whose name is Karim. Karim was an intelligent student and he wanted to pursue his career in Civil Engineering. But his parents wants him to be a doctor, so they forced him to do MBBS. During his 2nd year of MBBS, he committed suicide because he couldn't handle the pressure of his study.
Secondly, getting independence from your parents makes you responsible and you will understand the reality of the cruel world. When you will be with your parents, you don't have to think so much because most of your decision and work will be decided by your parents. But if you live your life by your own, then you will have to struggle in every bit of moment and you will learn a lot from your surrounding. For example, when i was doing my undergraduate, my mom left us for 10-12 days. As i am the only child of my parents, i had to do all the housework like cooking, take care of my father and so on. I never did any kind of work like this before but when i faced this situation, i started to learning this thing on my own. By the help of youtube videos, i start to learn how to make some basic dish. I started to take care fo my old father as well as cleaning the house. If my mom never left us, then i will never learn this kind of thing.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, for example, kind of, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 73.0 43.0788530466 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 368.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.34239130435 4.8611393121 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42132679096 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502717391304 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 490.5 618.680645161 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.4664140824 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 72.6363636364 100.406767564 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7272727273 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.27272727273 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 15.0 5.5376344086 271% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226695137024 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699457118283 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.090946751127 0.0737576698707 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.206281671287 0.150856017488 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110667413922 0.0645574589148 171% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 11.7677419355 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 58.1214874552 139% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.1575268817 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.6 10.9000537634 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.92 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 86.8835125448 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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