Some young adults want independence from their parents as soon as possible. Other young adults prefer to live with their families for a longer time. Which of these situations do you think is better?
No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of either to be with parents for a long time or to be independent of their parents as soon as possible. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely prefer to be independent of parents as soon as possible. It's my firm belief that being independent of the family at an earlier period of young adults for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, young adults have to be independent because it makes one strong and brave earlier and that provide him/her the confidence to live even in the worst conditions. To live a life, itself a challenge, so we just have to accept that as earlier as we can. Life teaches us so many different things when we live life independently. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter, has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, when I was in my earlier days I used to live with my parents but my big brother had left the house since his high school days. He used to sell newspapers in the morning and worked part-time in the restaurant to earn money for his livelihood and the cost of his studies. As a result, he became so strong and handles the worldly things easily without any hesitation. He is now a marketing manager in the earlier stages of his carrier due to his passion and skills to be independent in his works that boosted his confidence and it is now reflected in his works too. For this reason, I prefer to be independent as soon as possible from parents to learn about life and make ownself brave enough to be accustomed to the surroundings.
Secondly, to be independent, makes your own knowledgable about the different circumstances of life. Not only there is money to earn in life but also we have to enhance knowledge about the world too. There are so many things in the world that we aren't making it out because of staying with parents: confining our minds. This is what never compels us to know more about the different situations of the world as parents are always there to help us. Drawing from my own life experience, I remember when I was in my younger stage, one of my friends always used to stick with the parents and he had no knowledge that what is happening in the world. The government had announced to be in the room till evening as the hurricane was about to come that day, but his parents were in office and were too busy that they couldn't make time to inform him about the hurricane. And that day, he was playing outside and he got caught in the hurricane and seriously injured but fortunately got alive. This is the reason why I say young adult have to be independent so that they can know about the world that what is actually happening around them at that particular period of time as well as about coming future.
In light of the above-forthmentioned reasons, I strongly believe that young adults have to be independent of their parents as soon as possible since, it makes us brave, strong and provides many more opportunities in life to learn about this world.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, second, secondly, so, well, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 15.1003584229 199% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 91.0 52.1666666667 174% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2522.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 562.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.48754448399 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86893614481 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64979838217 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 212.727598566 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430604982206 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 806.4 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 47.7648719583 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.095238095 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7619047619 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.33333333333 5.45110844103 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209918505954 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0672915430848 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0680576060213 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167731454621 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0822290267988 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.06 10.9000537634 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.34 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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