Some people believe that video games could inspire young students' interest and make their study more efficient rather than distract them and be a waste of time, so young students should be allowed to play video games.Do you agree or disagree?
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that state of art devices and technologies has played an important role in the young people’s life. They use some of these high-technology devices in their leisure time as a fun and entertainment. Not all people concur when this issue arises. To being cognizant to the logic behind those who endorse or repudiate the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that playing video games is not proper for young students at their breaks and they could replace these games with some profitable activities. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, psychological and physical damages and addiction to these games could be picked up for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the aggression and extra weight as negative effects of these video games, based on the statistics of different general questionnaires in sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that students devoted many times for playing with these cutting-edge devices and their physical activities is low. To elucidate on, these games do not need any movement and the fat collects in the body of the students. Furthermore, these games have very harsh scenes and stories which could change student’s behaviors and makes them aggressive in their life. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by Rice University’s graduate students unveiled the fact that about 85 percent of students who have some psychological problems in the secondary schools played video games for more than 4 hours in each day.
In addition to the reason raised above; being addicted to these games could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, students spend a lot of time for playing and abandon other activities such as studying and sport. To delineate, students play out of standard and could not focus on other activities which deplete their performance. For instance, my cousin played very much with video games and he addicted to playing games and did not give up T.V and games. In addition, he did not spend time for cleaning and regularity. These behavior shows his addiction to these games and made him aggressive and ill.
Drawing upon the reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that playing video games is harmful to students and it has bad effects on their health in both aspects of psychology and body.
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...in both aspects of psychology and body.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, regarding, second, so, for instance, in addition, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2201.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.03661327231 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85336431567 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54004576659 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 687.6 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.7762903533 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.470588235 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7058823529 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.327958747792 0.236089414692 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100787034815 0.076458572812 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583415536393 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202089017628 0.150856017488 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593545083017 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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