Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
The Presence of new technologies such as the internet and human’s accessibility to a variety of information and news transferring systems stimulate people to know about current events in the world every day. No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that these devices change the world to a small village. Not all people concur when this issue arises. Being cognizant to the logic behind those who repudiate or endorse the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that it is vital for the humankind to know about news published daily in the world even though these are irrelevant to him/her. Among a plentitude of reason in support of this assertion, acquiring knowledge and experience and possible indirect effects of these events could be picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the benefits of increase our knowledge about phenomena around their life, based upon of the statistics of different general questionnaires in sundry countries, people are unanimous about this conviction that people could broaden their horizon about events around them by aware of news. Human’s life and energy are limited and he/she can not experience anything. Thus, reading or watching daily news help us to learn about different things and exploit them in our life for improve standards of lifestyle. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. For instance, last week in Iran, a big tower got fire because of rejecting some safety criteria for fire-control. I saw that on T.V and found that my building is like this tower needs some fire equipment and I bought them quickly and installed in a proper position.
In addition to the reason raised above; indirect impacts of some events in our life could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, many events have some consequences on the whole world. For instance, when the oil cost increases in the world, it takes concerns of different countries in the different direction. Oil sellers tolerate some economic damages, while, buyers, in contrast, could earn a lot of money, and it is profitable for them. Thus, people could predict future effects of some world changes by increasing their data about events; moreover, they will make a plan to control harmful effects of these changes. The results of a study carried out by Rice University’s graduate students unveiled the fact that successful investors allocate more time to know about different news about the world. In fact, they use obtained information to anticipate which type of invest has much more profit.
Drawing upon the above reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that it is better for people to aware about daily events happened around the world. Not only it helps them to increase their knowledge and experiences but also they could avoid some indirect disadvantageous.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 784, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: V
...teria for fire-control. I saw that on T.V and found that my building is like this...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in contrast, in fact, such as, on the whole
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalization wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2556.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 503.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08151093439 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79202551699 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 274.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544731610338 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 811.8 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 71.7108604048 48.9658058833 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.8 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.15 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6 5.45110844103 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182074886948 0.236089414692 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.052297239612 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383591075278 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117312235992 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0119165621122 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 11.7677419355 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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