With the technology innovation, human beings have broken the limitation of geological distance, and tightened the connection of people all over the world. Therefore, in my point of view, I strongly agree that it is essential for us to be aware of events happening around the world, even if they don't seem to be related to us for two reasons.
First of all, since we all live on earth no matter which part of it, it is very likely that one event occurring in one country will happen in other country. In this way, if we can care and learn about the occurrence of this event in the other country, we can gain experience from them to cope with it. For instance, since Japan encounters earthquakes frequently, it is very advanced in setting up the standard operation process when an earthquake hits. Therefore, when 311 Eastern Japan Earthquake happened, the media in Taiwan focused not only how severe the disaster was, but also how mature and efficient their disaster response system was. With this learning experience, Taiwan government has gained the opportunity to review and improve the current disaster response process, and it turned out to be a great success proved by a far faster recovery from an earthquake happening last year comparing to the past. Consequently, this example clear illustrates the significance of knowing the events occurrence around the world so to gain experience from them.
Furthermore, it is not too exaggerated to say that we are all living in a global community that one single event in a country may result in a great impact or indicate an important message to the whole world. This is to say, even if the events are not affecting our daily lives right here right now, it doesn't mean that they have no impact on us. For example, the serious forest fire in Australia does not physically affect me, who is located in the northern part of the world. Nevertheless, this event is a severe result of global warming which will impact everyone on the earth some day. It delivers a serious warning that the earth is significantly harmed by human pollution, and we need to stop it as soon as possible if we want to prevent the event happening in Australia from happening in the future. This example demonstrates an event that happens tens of thousands of kilometers away from me, and does not affect my daily life indeed. However, it delivers a significant message to the whole world from the one and only planet that we live on. Therefore, even if the forest fire in Australia seems nothing to do with me now, if we humans don’t do something to stop global warming, this kind of event may happen again in the future and maybe just right in front of us.
In conclusion, based on the two reasons above, I am with the statement that people should all be aware of events happening around the world even if they don’t seem to affect our daily lives for now. For one reason, we can learn from the events and react better if the similar events happen around us in the future. For another, the events may sometimes seem far away from us but contain important message and warning that we all need to be aware of and take actions.
- TOEFL T P O 28 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task73
- TPO-29:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? To improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo66
- TOEFL T P O 28 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 296, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
...appening around the world, even if they dont seem to be related to us for two reason...
Line 3, column 488, Rule ID: CD_NN
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'Earthquake' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'earthquakes'.
...hits. Therefore, when 311 Eastern Japan Earthquake happened, the media in Taiwan focused n...
Line 3, column 993, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'events'' or 'event's'?
Suggestion: events'; event's
...strates the significance of knowing the events occurrence around the world so to gain ...
Line 5, column 303, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
...ur daily lives right here right now, it doesnt mean that they have no impact on us. Fo...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 84.0 52.1666666667 161% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2607.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 558.0 407.700716846 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67204301075 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56417797189 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.453405017921 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 826.2 618.680645161 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.958331934 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.210526316 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3684210526 20.6045352989 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15789473684 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278115250216 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0913782081707 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652264621757 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176380536451 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556356664091 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
automated_readability_index: 15.3 11.7677419355 130% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.5 58.1214874552 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.4 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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