With the significant growth of gender equality in employment, there are more and more families consisting of parents who are both working, which leaves much less time for parents to spend with their children. In order to maintain a good relationship with their children, I think parents should spend time playing games and sports with their children during their free time for two reasons.
To begin with, children have to learn and study for long hours during their time at school, so speaking of the time after school, children usually expect to relax and do whatever makes them feel happy. Therefore, if parents stay with their children to do activities related to schoolwork even after school, children are very likely to feel stressful and they will definitely not appreciate this companion, which keeps them under great pressure. In this way, the companion which is expected to help keep a close relationship between parents and children will then turn out to be a harm to the relationship since children will feel unhappy and stressed during the time with their parents, leading children to have a tendency to avoid getting along with their parents. However, if parents can spend time with their children playing their favorite sports after school, children will feel excited and always looking forward to the time when their parents come home and play with them. Consequently, parents and children can cultivate a strong and tight relationship gradually.
Furthermore, by playing games or sports with children, parents can build up an image of playmates or friends to children, which makes parents no longer just boring and tedious seniors to in children's mind. In this way, children will feel closer to their parents and be willing to share their secrets or real thoughts with their parents. Take my brother for an example. My parents used to be traditional Asian parents who care much about school work, whereas my brother is an outgoing person who loves basketball more than anything. However, whenever my parents are with him, they always focus on my brother's academic performance, which makes my brother thinks they are so yesterday and nerdy that they will never understand what he is thinking. Time after time, I found out the gap between my parents and brother become too big to ignore. In order to fix this relationship, I suggest my parents spend time playing basketball with my brother to understand what he truly loves so they can have common topic and more reaction. In the beginning, my brother hesitated to play with them, whom he thought were too old to play basketball. However, my parents did not give up and even brought a basketball hoop at home to practice. Gradually, they would play together and it turns out that my parents really enjoy it! Not only because they have so much fun with my brother while playing basketball, but also because they now have so many topics aside from school work to chat with. As for my brother, my parents are just like his best friends now that he will even share the top secret with them but not me.
In conclusion, based on the two reasons above, I strongly suggest parents spend time with their children to play games or sports in their free time, since the time they play together will not only make children feel relaxed and excited but also help build up a strong and close relationship between parents and children.
- TPO-45 Integrated Writing Task73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, really, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, as for, i think, in conclusion, speaking of, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 28.0 13.8261648746 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 89.0 52.1666666667 171% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2818.0 1977.66487455 142% => OK
No of words: 576.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89236111111 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43829867811 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 250.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434027777778 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 817.2 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 20.1344086022 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.5854344086 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.315789474 100.406767564 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3157894737 20.6045352989 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.42105263158 5.45110844103 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326491329917 0.236089414692 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125695676449 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0838987618708 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249548261964 0.150856017488 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0411199290112 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
automated_readability_index: 16.8 11.7677419355 143% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 10.0537634409 139% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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