Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need
No one can cast a shadow of doubt on the fact that charity institutes have a paramount role in societies to help poor people for having a good life. Annually some famous celebrities and rich people donate a lot of money to these organizations for providing food, house, borrowing money for establishing small businesses and medicine. Not all people concur when this issue arises. Being cognizant to the logic behind those who repudiate or endorse the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that donating money to some organization which distributing it among people for establishing some small businesses is more beneficial for societies in comparison with other options. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, providing new job chances for other poor people and improvement of the economy of the societies could be picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding the providing job as an opportunity for being needless of other people’s help, based on the statistics of different general questionnaires of sundry countries, people are unanimous about the conviction that people could hire new poor people when their own businesses begin; moreover, these employees could obtain their needs by working in these new jobs. They could prepare food, house, and medicine for their families without any donating of other. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by Rice University’s graduate students unveiled the fact that Iran’s government could advocate about 10 million dollars in start-up organization, and about 8500 persons could employ in 250 work-centers. These results show the importance of the new businesses in omitting poorness in people which these chances could establish by other people who need money for starting.
In addition to the reason raised above; the rule of providing the job in the economic prosperous of countries could also substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. In conjunction with public belief, these new businesses could get services to the people by addressing new production or services. These activities prosper the roots of progress in the societies and the rate of jobless people could reduce significantly. For instance, when some small company starts to work for manufacturing some small electronic devices, many people find the opportunity for getting a job, and it reinforces their purchasing power. Furthermore, these products use by other big companies and they will provide their basic needs by purchasing small companies’ productions. It will improve the economy of the societies.
Drawing upon of the above reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that donating money to some organization for establishing some new small businesses and employing other poor people are the best method for helping them. Not only it makes the job for these poor people and makes them independence of other helps but also it could improve the economic state of the countries.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...these employees could obtain their needs by working in these new jobs. They could...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2691.0 1977.66487455 136% => OK
No of words: 509.0 407.700716846 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28683693517 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97120864183 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510805500982 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 846.9 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 95.5529230904 48.9658058833 195% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.5 100.406767564 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2777777778 20.6045352989 137% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.83333333333 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205025523428 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0749820486356 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495866534562 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140515297969 0.150856017488 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398341516699 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 11.7677419355 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 58.1214874552 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.01818996416 116% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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