Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Young people in each society choose some people as the hero and use the hero as a pattern for obtaining their lifestyle. No one can cast a shadow of doubt on this fact that it is important for youngs select someone who has an acceptable personality and features. Not all people concur when this issue arises. Being cognizant to the logic behind those who repudiate or endorse the legitimacy of this contention, not having any biased perception, I presume that young people affected by viewpoints of celebrities, while old people , in contrast, less accepted celebrities’ opinions. Among a plentitude of reasons in support of this assertion, people’s experiences and the proximity of famous people lifestyle to ideals in young peoples’ minds could be picked out for further analysis.
To commence with, a consensus has yet to be reached; however, regarding evolving people mind during the different events of the life, based upon the statistics of different general questionnaires of sundry countries, people are unanimous about this conviction that people during their life exposed to different situations and difficulties, these hardships help them to improve their skills and they acquire many different experiences. They could find a stable position in their life and gain required knowledge for achieving goals. Thus, old people passed these steps in their life and most of them could present their own views where may be different from renown people ideas. On the other hand, young people are fresh and easily get affected by varieties of ideas which are transferred by famous people. A vivid example can be given to shed light on what was elaborated above. The results of a study carried out by Rice university’s graduate students unveiled that young peoples spend more time than old people for surveying famous people life on the internet. These results show that they could get more gain of celebrity's life than old people.
In addition to the reason raised above; the similarities of famous people life to the ideal life in young’s minds could substantiate the justifiability of the claim made at the outset of this essay. Young peoples have different desires and viewpoints more different from old people ideas. Indeed, this idea tends to be more powerful and renown in future. They try to imitate many aspects of famous people’s life and show them in their real life. This issue related to the approaching of their views to these famous persons. For instance, my young brother loves Cristian Ronaldo as a famous soccer player. He wants to be a good player like him, and imitates his behavior in talking, walking and so on.
Drawing upon the above reasons, discreetly put, as far as my personal perspective on the topic is concerned, I reiterate that renown people’s ideas are followed by young peoples more than old people. Not only it is referred to people experience of their life but also it related to the nearness of their thinking of famous people and young peoples.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, thus, while, for instance, in addition, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2527.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 496.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09475806452 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71922212354 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79035203431 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522177419355 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 783.9 618.680645161 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 87.1296112754 48.9658058833 178% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.333333333 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.619047619 20.6045352989 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16531223823 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605193055536 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.035680074705 0.0737576698707 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119469226262 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0157640200462 0.0645574589148 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.54 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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