Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
And organization that gives people money to start their own small business
And organization that provides medical care to people in need
donating money to improve the quality of poor people’s lives would be a direct way to have a contribution to reduce the poverty in a society. different people donate money with different aims for instance, providing food, medical care, housing, education, life facilities, job, and that sort of things. In my opinion, if I want to help charities, I prefer to devote my money to help poor people to start their own business. The ensuing paragraphs explain my reasons for this position.
First of all, providing opportunity for poor people to open up their own job not only helps them to have a better lives, but also has a positive impact on a society. Put it in other words, some indirect jobs would be made by supporting people in need to start a new business. On example can drive this notion home. Imagine a poor rural man that a charitable organization gave him a money to buy a small farmland and cultivate cotton. it is clear that the man need some workers helping him so, he can use his family members and also hire some workers. Moreover, he need hire a driver to take his crops to cities and sell them to factories which need cotton to produce cloths. Thus, in this way the poor man not only can provides his and his family’s needs, but also can help other people to have job. that’s why I think in this way.
Secondly, I believe helping to charitable organizations which make chance for poor ones to have their own job, is one help for whole their lives. To be specific, people who rely on charities for their food, medical care and so on, are so vulnerable and need long run support. this is because, if the charity alter its policies and decided to spend money on the other issues such as addict people of child labors, those poor people will get into serious troubles. On the other hand, people who received money from charities to open up a new job, will experience a self-sufficient and financially independent lives in their near future. Therefore, the charities could move to the other poor individuals and give them a hand with help.
In conclusion, if I want to opt one philenthrapic activity and give money to charities dealing with the issue, I will choose helping to provide job opportunities for people in need. that is because this is one time help for their whole lives and besides, although in this way we help a poor individual, other people could take advantage of this kind of help.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, sort of, such as, first of all, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2004.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 432.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.63888888889 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61170206079 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.493055555556 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 638.1 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.6123060729 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.473684211 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7368421053 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8947368421 5.45110844103 200% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.5376344086 181% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285774736939 0.236089414692 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0952537139868 0.076458572812 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561158608261 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198587519369 0.150856017488 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0324876176253 0.0645574589148 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.93 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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