In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at a young age.
Some people are inclined toward the idea that adults should learn how to spend their money at young age. However, others may take the opposite viewpoint and believe that it is not necessary for children to learn manage their own money when they are at a young stage of their life. In my perspective, it is vital for adults to try to manage their money at young age, in order to become financially responsible. In the following paragraphs, I will pinpoint the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite reason worth mentioning is that children learn the importance of currency in early age which is an essential lesson for them. Nowadays, many parents have a financial problem since their income and expense do not match each other since their income is low. Therefore, parents can not spend a lot of money on demand of their child. Because of that, they try to teach their children about the importance of money by practical ways. For example, parent gives their children some indoor tasks such as cleaning rooms or putting out the garbage and they give their children prize or money when they finished their assigned tasks. Hence, children learn earning money is not a simple task and require work. Since children experience the value of money in young days, they become more responsible in financial matters as adults.
A further more subtle point is that children become prepare for their future challenging. It is an undeniable fact that children will leave their family after a certain age since they tend to be dependable on themselves. Therefore, it is an excellent experience to learn how to spend their own money since they will become independent. For instance, a person who got accepted in a college or university will leave his parent and go to a dormitory. If he has knowledge about financial issue, he can easily spend his money because he know how to divide his money for a whole month. Therefore, he will not face many financial problem in his future life. On the other hand, if a person do not have any knowledge about this subject, he will lose or waste his saving to become knowledgeable.
To make a long story short, based on the aforementioned arguments, due to the place of money on human lives and make children ready for future days, children should learn to manage their money since it is valuable lesson for them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 213, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to manage'
Suggestion: to manage
... is not necessary for children to learn manage their own money when they are at a youn...
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Line 5, column 666, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to earn'.
Suggestion: to earn
...r assigned tasks. Hence, children learn earning money is not a simple task and require ...
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Line 7, column 533, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'knows'.
Suggestion: knows
...e can easily spend his money because he know how to divide his money for a whole mon...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1950.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 406.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80295566502 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52317872469 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.470443349754 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2356245412 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.631578947 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3684210526 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26315789474 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.470089699138 0.236089414692 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151127956874 0.076458572812 198% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.113545721517 0.0737576698707 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.306302360442 0.150856017488 203% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.133898538739 0.0645574589148 207% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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