Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports for the following reasons.
First, the limited time should be used to build connections between parents and children. To build a strong connection, the optimal way is to do something which children would devote themselves to. In young people's mind, playing games or sports are definitely what they love to do. For example, my dad was an engineer when I was in elementary school, and he was always busy. However, I seldom felt we are not close enough because we have common interest-playing tennis. When he was free, we would spare all of our time playing tennis together. Therefore, I still felt we have a connection while he went back to work. However, if my dad wanted me to do my schoolwork in our quality time, I would have devastated to avoid spending time with him.
Second, parents should teach their own children lessons in person during that limited time, especially some lessons would not learn from school. If they play games like puzzles, parents can use the opportunity to teach their children how to use their imaginations out of the boxes. Moreover, if they play sports together, parents can teach them not to be too proud but more humble when they win the play, and also not to be too upset but fell more delightful to learn from the loss. The most significant lessons can not be learned from the book even the school. For example, the courses that how to be kind, the importance of being honest, etc. Those things need parents to teach their children while spending time around them.
Last but not least, to toddlers and teenagers, they won't remember all the details of the time they spent with parents. While they gradually growing up, they will only remember the memories which content strong feelings, such as depression or extremely happy. Thus, parents should do their best to leave their children great memories which contribute to childhoods that make children well-oriented.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 425, Rule ID: TOO_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'to upset'?
Suggestion: to upset
...n they win the play, and also not to be too upset but fell more delightful to learn from ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1712.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.79551820728 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48457646863 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518207282913 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.350870725 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.1111111111 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.45110844103 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.426180931381 0.236089414692 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133260243494 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158354762955 0.0737576698707 215% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.322433719056 0.150856017488 214% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.228903748929 0.0645574589148 355% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.23 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 63.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.0 Out of 30
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