Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

No one can decline the fact that we should obey and follow a variety of rules in order to success or just live better. However, vibrant debates on whether rules that communities hope young people to obey are too strict have aroused public attention. As far as I am concerned, it's definitely true that rules set by societies are too strict for teens.

First, the social media, public beliefs and parents’ expectation always set a clear rule for young people which they are obliged to success, and the definition of the success is unified-earning more money. It seems like only in this way can they lead a happy life. However, a huge amount of burden caused by responding to the expectation sometimes, ruins their life in contrast. They have to give up their interests in exchange for opportunities which can earn more money. Hence, the rule limits young people’s individual development.

Second, the rule that many companies today only hire people who received advanced degrees makes a wealth of talented teenage without high level education hard to success. Nowadays, almost each corporation places heavily emphasis on high education, leaving fewer chances for lots of young people who don't attend universities. The high threshold set by societies hinders the career development of ambitious young people. On the other hand, the rule also causes the high unemployment rate. As a result, the burden of communities increases correspondingly.

Third, there is an invisible rule that older people receive lots of respect due to their rich experience while young people are viewed as too naïve to finish wonderful work independently. It is not uncommon that societies downplay the ingenuity of young people. Nonetheless, the fresh ideas and creativity are mostly produced by them. They incline to be receptive of new staff and embrace unique concepts, which invariably makes a big difference. Thus, the unequal rule would decrease the communities’ productivity.

In short, rules no doubt are too strict for current young people, which should be removed. Meanwhile, it also has negative impacts on societies themselves.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, however, if, nonetheless, second, so, third, thus, while, as to, in contrast, in short, no doubt, as a result, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1803.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 341.0 407.700716846 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28739002933 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29722995808 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91785466904 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601173020528 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.2875270719 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.15 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.05 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4 5.45110844103 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221861356205 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0629234752793 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506882067264 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129445767329 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539308254318 0.0645574589148 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 86.8835125448 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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