As is common sense, arts can enrich our spiritual life while athletics assists in strengthening the health. Therefore, vibrant debates on whether more money should be given to arts or athletics have aroused. Some argue that spending more money on arts is more beneficial, while the reverse side advocates athletics should be given more financial assistance. As far as I am concerned, both choices have their own unique advantages that can by no means be surpassed by the other, It is too rash to label either of them as the superior and more beneficial choice.
Arts including painting, dancing singing and so on, have become a part of our daily life no matter who you are and where you live. It is not uncommon that even for little boys and girls at the age of 3-5 years, their parents and teachers prefer to teach them singing and painting as fundamental subjects. What's more, a vast majority of people incline to claim that people are born with talent in arts. In other words, they are not learning it from outside, they are discovering it from inside. Otherwise, the tremendous stress of life would easily cause psychological diseases. Arts, with no doubt are the effective means to get exhausted people rid of busy work, which explains the popularity of the karaoke in modern communities. Therefore, arts play a crucial role in releasing people's pressure and benefiting them with happiness.
On the other hand, athletics is supposed to be placed equally emphasis for its positive sides on the human body. Almost everyone falls victim a variety of diseases during their lifespan. Even though a common and less harmful disease such as flu, could torture your body in a couple of days and decrease your work efficiency. Therefore, it carries no exaggeration to point out that the health should be the priority, and working out is invariably in high demand to reach this goal. Thus, holding the state-sponsored Olympic games serves as a sign or an opportunity to encourage people to lead a healthy life. In short, for the sake of physical health, athletics is necessary as well.
To sum up, only combining both the arts and athletics with the same importance can we lead a balanced and meaningful life. With reference to the argument above, there should be no superiority of either one to the other. As a result, it’s reasonable to draw the conclusion that government should spend the same money in support of arts and athletics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, in short, no doubt, such as, as a result, in other words, to sum up, with reference to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89638554217 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67571455802 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 240.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578313253012 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 641.7 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1862546847 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214051200516 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582446103937 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0664739732152 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128582201029 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611161507141 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.85 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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