Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
The debate on which sector requires more support from the government, in order to ensure its prosperity, holds a lot of different opinions. Some argue that arts require more help because of its dying nature, while other's argue athletics deserve more support because of their popularity. However, if I were to pick a side, I would definitely disagree that arts should receive more help from than athletics. I feel this way for several reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, art is a subject of creativity and it can never be forced or endorsed. To be more specific, any type of art can prosper only when the artist creates something out of the normal, when he/she transcends beyond the ordinary. In such a situation, a support from government, which is mostly in economic from, cannot account to notable changes. On the contrary, similar supports on athletics sector can cause huge changes because, although, any kind of performance in sports depends on the performance of the player, but still the chances of doing better in any competition can be increased by using that money for players training,providing enriching diets, travel and other supports and many more. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, during my school days, all the students had to take mandatory sports participation but not participation in art classes. As far as I could intuit, this was because a child can develop his skills in any type of sports with enough encouragement, practice and equipments, but similar success in arts or any other creative classes cannot be ensured. Anyhow, let me make it clear that I am not cliaming that supporting arts will be a total waste, but am justing stating the obvious that no amount of support can create a sure shot art laureate from a novice. As a result, the government should certainly place their money on the sector, which provides more secure returns and is likely to succeed, in other words, athletics.
Secondly, an artist has the ability to make it own their own by publicizing his arts to the public, Be that as it may, an athlete cannot do the same. This is because it is hard to display and get substantial support from the public by displaying sport skills, yet a talented artist can simply make his living by displaying his arts in the street. Drawing from my own experience, I have two uncles who are both engaged in the above mentioned professions. Although,both of my uncles are still searching for recognition and are struggling independently, but still it is easier for my artist uncle. Because even without having an elaborate display of his arts in a museum, he still sells most of his art by displaying them in local art exhibitions and local stores. On the other hand, my athlete uncle, who has superior skills in football, can never succeed autonomously, since, it is not possible for him to just go and display his football skills in the street. And even if he does so, he will still not make enough money. It's certainly clear to see why I am positing for higher supports of athletes.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly aver that government support should be more aimed towards sport personnel rather than artists.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, i feel, kind of, as a result, in other words, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2747.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 568.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83626760563 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88187981987 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74801724251 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 284.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 847.8 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.165876621 48.9658058833 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.863636364 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8181818182 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 11.8709677419 160% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2289445986 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675823082949 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.053241619242 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157031807294 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454845898161 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 126.0 86.8835125448 145% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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