Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Nowadays, enormous methods and tricks are used to show the new launched products for all over the world. On of them is advertising. Some people believe that advertising is the best way to describe the product as it is. However, I others disafree. From my humble perspective, I firmly agree that advertising could cheat the consumers and show the product with benefits that it does not have. I feel that delve into some rationales and relevant examples that I will illustrate them in the subsequent essay.
The first exquisite point that comes to my mind is advertising focus on the advantage of their product. To be more specific, promoting the products require to highligh on the brilliant side of the compound and ostrocize the disadvantage. Therefore, the external appearence will entice the consumer even the entire part has not have the sufficient quality to continue its competition in the future. To shed light on this subject. From my own experience, I am a diabetic patient since I was kid. I used to take regular medicine and my sugar level is in the limit. However, my biggest dilemma that I became tired from the consistent injection of insulin. Suddenly, I saw in the TV that there was a new launch for a sublingual drug. So, I felt that will save my life from the excruciating injection everyday. Thus, I bought it. Consequently, my life became misearable because my insulin level was gradually increasing. Therefore, I realize that advertising show only a part from reality and obscure the others.
Another point to be mentioned that promoting companies aspiration is raising their sales by exacerbating in the product properities. They are showing the product but in a different way. They perceive that this is the optimum way to introduce the product in an interesting way. Nonetheless, the consumer may expect some action from the product it could not have. To illustrate more broadly, from my personal work field. I was assigned in a new company as promoter. The owner felt that he had spent a huge quantum of capital to establish the company and also in advertising. Accordingly, he asked me to exaggerate my product to attract my categories of clients. As a result, a plethora of complains came on our affair as our product did not have the same posted criteria.
To wrap it up, contemplating on the foresaid statement. I firmly concur that advertising could show a high quality for product that did not really good. By underlining on the advantage of the product and also by exaggerate the product criteria.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e people believe that advertising is the best way to describe the product as it i...
^^
Line 5, column 229, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... describe the product as it is. However, I others disafree. From my humble perspe...
^^
Line 5, column 335, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at advertising could cheat the consumers and show the product with benefits that ...
^^
Line 9, column 328, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
...e consumer even the entire part has not have the sufficient quality to continue its ...
^^^^
Line 9, column 796, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...my life from the excruciating injection everyday. Thus, I bought it. Consequently, my li...
^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 167, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a different way" with adverb for "different"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ities. They are showing the product but in a different way. They perceive that this is the optimum...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 255, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an interesting way" with adverb for "interesting"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...he optimum way to introduce the product in an interesting way. Nonetheless, the consumer may expect s...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, nonetheless, really, so, therefore, thus, i feel, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2121.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93255813953 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89685773702 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506976744186 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.6057156487 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 70.7 100.406767564 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.3333333333 20.6045352989 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.13333333333 5.45110844103 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.88709677419 348% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127084459218 0.236089414692 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335988487206 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0416887623962 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.097627209077 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431829147155 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.