Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Nowadays people used different ways to attract more customers. Advertisement one of the best ways that attract myriad clients or customers. Although some believe the products are shown in the advertisement far better than real. From my perspective, it is completely true and it changed to the challenge for many persons that want to purchase a good. Because the picture of the good in the advertisements does not ensure customers that it deserves to be bought.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that companies use this way to deceive people to buy their products. As a matter of fact, more customers are attracted to their products or services by showing the advertisement better and it accompanies by the huge lucrative. To take my experience as an example, when I saw an advertisement about the high equipment gym, I become eager to enroll in it. Unfortunately, as I went there, I saw it is completely different from something is depicted in the advertisement. As a result, it became an experience for me not to trust advertisements. According to this matter, it provides a perfect situation for online shopping. However, if people touch and see the products, they are reluctant to buy them.
Another equally noteworthy point in corroborating this issue is that due to the fact that manufacturers or producers want to approach to the ideal picture and quality of their products, they take this method. Though the result of the survey conducted in the American Society of California state revealed most of the people no longer pay heed to the appearance of the advertisements. In addition, they try to choose their needs based on the quality or experience of other individuals who consumed them.
In brief, all the aforementioned reasons lead us to the conclusion that due to the lack of correspondence of the advertisement with the real product, people become suspicious to buy them. As a result, it is anticipated that it affects negatively the economic development and, besides, decreases the amount of the sells.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...at attract myriad clients or customers. Although some believe the products are shown in ...
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...y persons that want to purchase a good. Because the picture of the good in the advertis...
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Message: “Though” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... their products, they take this method. Though the result of the survey conducted in t...
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Message: "needs based" is only accepted in certain dialects. For something more widely acceptable, try 'basing' or 'to be based'.
Suggestion: basing; to be based
...ddition, they try to choose their needs based on the quality or experience of other i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...des, decreases the amount of the sells.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, however, if, so, in addition, in brief, as a matter of fact, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 338.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05029585799 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15618911163 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53550295858 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2589090725 48.9658058833 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.411764706 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8823529412 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.17647058824 5.45110844103 95% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117497368645 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0361253593494 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0469170083211 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701692409897 0.150856017488 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0191466843165 0.0645574589148 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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