As is common sense, arts can enrich our spiritual life while athletics assists in strengthening the health. Therefore, vibrant debates on whether more money should be given to arts or athletics is ridiculous. In my opinion, they are equally important.
Arts including painting, dancing singing and so on, have become a part of our daily life no matter who you are and where you live. It is not uncommon that even for little boys and girls at the age of 3-5 years, their parents and teachers prefer to teach them sing a song or draw a simple painting as fundamental subjects. What's more, a vast majority of people incline to claim that people are born with talent in arts. In other words, they are not learning it from outside, they are discovering it from inside. Otherwise, the tremendous stress of life would easily cause psychological diseases. Arts, with no doubt are the effective means to get exhausted people rid of busy work, which explains the popularity of the karaoke in modern communities. Therefore, arts play a crucial role in releasing people's pressure and benefiting them with happiness.
On the other hand, athletics is supposed to be placed equally emphasis for its positive sides on the human body. Almost everyone falls victim a variety of diseases during their lifespan. Even though a common and less harmful disease such as flu, could torture your body in a couple of days and decrease your work efficiency. Therefore, it carries no exaggeration to point out that the health should be the priority, and working out is invariably in high demand to reach this goal. Thus, holding the state-sponsored Olympic games serves as a sign or an opportunity to encourage people to lead a healthy life. In short, for the sake of physical health, athletics is necessary as well.
To sum up, only combining both the arts and athletics with the same importance can we lead a balanced and meaningful life. With reference to the argument above, there should be no superiority of either one to the other. As a consequence, it’s reasonable to draw the conclusion that government should spend the same money in support of arts and athletics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, in short, no doubt, such as, in my opinion, in other words, to sum up, with reference to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91780821918 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72517230342 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602739726027 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6678414174 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.4736842105 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2105263158 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94736842105 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196791551919 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0519072154971 0.076458572812 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642305094773 0.0737576698707 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120624985815 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060382081362 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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