Essay topics:
"According to a recent report by our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the last year. Clearly, the content of these reviews is not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not in the quality of our movies but with public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater quantity of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising."
Recently, in a report from marketing department, it was revealed "that the number of the people attending Super Screen-produced movies last year decreased compared to any other year; however the percentage of positive review of this movie actually increased during past year and it was believed that advertising could help to inflate the number of people watching Super Screen-produced movies". This might be true but the marketing department has not mentioned about the actual reason about the people not attending the movie.The report hasnot mentioned about the type of movie broadcasted and other factor what has caused the paucity of people to watch the movie.
The report hasnot mentioned whether the people were able to construe the crux of movie or not. The Super Screen- produced movie that were shown in other years than past year might be of action and thriller genre; however the movie screened in the past year might be melodrammatic which caused the plethoras of population to dodge the movie compared to others years. The report hasnot mentioned about the time when the movie was displayed. Had the movie screened in holidays like that of other years than past years, the movie displayed in the past year would have many attendees.
It has mentioned that the increased number of positive reviews are rein in to the people; however failed to mentioned about few people who are unable to construe the indepth movie concept. Few people who had watched Super Screen-produced movies last year might have been frustrated with the concept of the movie and might have been unable to identify the crux of the movie.
The perception regarding the quality of movie could be different among the people. Some may like action while others may like love stories. The given report hasnot mentioned anything regarding this. The report hasnot mentioned about the latest condition of the hall. The movie hall might have been in ramsackle condition after the earthquake hit one and half year earlier and people might have been intimidated to visit the hall to watch Super Screen-produced movies last year.
Had the marketing department mentioned about all the problem that might have caused the lessening in the number of people attending Super Screen-produced movies last year, the member of Super Screen-produced movies could further improve the lacked procedure to entice legion of people just like of the years other that last year.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 399 350
No. of Characters: 2004 1500
No. of Different Words: 146 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.469 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.023 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.541 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.796 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.438 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.438 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 537, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...bout the people not attending the movie.The report hasnot mentioned about the type ...
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Line 1, column 600, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...oned about the type of movie broadcasted and other factor what has caused the pau...
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Line 2, column 95, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e to construe the crux of movie or not. The Super Screen- produced movie that were ...
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Line 2, column 366, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...dge the movie compared to others years. The report hasnot mentioned about the time ...
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Line 4, column 267, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...about the latest condition of the hall. The movie hall might have been in ramsackle...
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Line 5, column 77, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed about all the problem that might have caused the lessening in the number of pe...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, regarding, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2047.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1432160804 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61468953194 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.396984924623 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.8473053892 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 107.737895291 57.8364921388 186% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.214285714 119.503703932 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.4285714286 23.324526521 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78571428571 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.495319513072 0.218282227539 227% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187102928723 0.0743258471296 252% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136099664344 0.0701772020484 194% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.335003615556 0.128457276422 261% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.103388567983 0.0628817314937 164% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.3550499002 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.5979740519 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 12.3882235529 222% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.1389221557 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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