Essay topics:
"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The given prompt " The best way to develop leadership in youth in the field of government, industry and other field is by inculcating them with the sense of cooperation rather than competition" is highly contentitious among the people. Some may believe thaht cooperation is indespensable for leadership to emerge in the people while others may deny that and may consider competition as the key to evolve leadership in young people. I, personallly, am neither in support nor against the prompt with the introduction of the term 'any field' in the given prompt. My perception regarding the given prompt can be well illustrated by the below mentioned examples.
In the field of sports, football or cricket, developed leadership or captainship mostly emerged out of the competiiton of the player along with his flair to deal with the situation and cooperation among the team members. Rajesh, the captain of Rara Football Club, was introduced as the naive player among the teammates; however, with his perseverance and hardwork he became competent and was able to snatch the position of captain from former captain, competiting with his performance and is able to continue his position as captain due to his cooperative nature among players and all the crew members. Mahendra Singh Dhoni, former captain of Indian Cricket team, incessantly succeed in achieving the title in his cricketing career with his competiting ability and cooperative nature.
Sadhghuru, sagacious man, has once said that leaders are not only evolved with the competition, they should however be equipped with the feeling of sympathy. They should be able to understand the feeling people surrounding them. Not only the education and competition make someone succesful,they should be cooperative among the people they are with and with their adversaries as well. Bisheshwor Prasad Koirala, a initiator of Nepali congress party, was so sympathetic leader and he was well concerned about the desire and requirement of the citizen and he was cooperative among his fellowes and foes and hence is regarded as one of the greatest leader of all time of people.
Binod Chaudhary, one of the greatest business man of Nepal, has achieved his leadership skill with his education and is popular among the employee and the citizen of whole nation with his benevolent and cooperative nature. Had he been arrogant and was only focused on competition than he would have only been rich rather than popular maong the people
Through the presented examples, it can be well illuminated that inculcating the feeling competition and education along with cooperation can help the society to develop leadership among young people in the field of industry, government and others.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 290, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...n and competition make someone succesful,they should be cooperative among the people ...
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Line 3, column 412, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ies as well. Bisheshwor Prasad Koirala, a initiator of Nepali congress party, was...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, may, regarding, so, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 58.6224719101 118% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 438.0 442.535393258 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24200913242 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91589607277 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486301369863 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 704.065955056 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 23.0359550562 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 92.4621784184 60.3974514979 153% => OK
Chars per sentence: 176.615384615 118.986275619 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.6923076923 23.4991977007 143% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.61538461538 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141784700693 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0601034903889 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620079897642 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949830458833 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646696764447 0.0667264976115 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.1 14.1392134831 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 48.8420337079 78% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 12.1743820225 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 100.480337079 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 11.8971910112 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.2143820225 136% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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