In this article the author tells us some sity commissioners suggest that the city funding for the Grandview Symphony should be elminated due to the developments of the symphony. To support this recommendation, the author shows that the private contributions increased by 200 percent last year as well as the attendance doubled in a concert last year. While this suggestion is problematic because there are some loopholes in this statemant, we should evaluate them carefully.
To begin with, To what extent the private contributions helped the symphony is still in question. Even the author says this support increased dramatically by 200 percent , we do not know how much they contributed previously. Maybe there was few private contributions which take trivial part in the whole funding, although the contributions increased, it could still take a small part which could not be very helpfu compared with the numbers in percent.
In addtion, the attendance in a concert doubled. This evidence is not convincing as well because this was merely a single appearance. For the first time, it made me think about how many concerts did the symphony hold annually? What's more, what's the attendance of the other concerts the symphony held last year? These two questions are significant to us because it generally charaterize this symphonies' appearance for us to make the evaluation for them. Maybe there are only a few concerts the symphony held, more worse the attendance of other concerts were not well likewise. In this wat, the city funding is essential for them.
Thirdly, they announced they would increase the ticket prices next year, while this is not a reason that they would make more money hence they do not need the city funding later. We should find out why they increase the ticket price. For one thing, they could be very popular previously as the commissioners wish so they want make more profits, while this need further evidence to prove it. On the other hand, there is a high possiblity that the are running not well while the actors and players need salaries to live. This is possible while we need futher infromation either.So we can not make conclusion that this increasing tickets price plan means they can support themselves.
Finally, I belive it is important to ask other comissioners with this suggestion. Because we do not know how many commissioners opine this idea.Besides is there other means of elimianting this funding is still in question, thus the author should make a survey of all the commssioners or make a discssion inviting all the people relates to this funding to make a more comprehensive plan.
In conclusion, merely according to the evidence in the statement, the suggestion given by some commisioners is not compelling. To support this idea, the author should find other important informations. Firstly, the running condition of the symphony is essential as well as the contribution details by the individuals.Secondly, the other commissioners' advice are also important.
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: In this article the author tells us some sity commissioners suggest that the city funding for the Grandview Symphony should be elminated due to the developments of the symphony.
Error: elminated Suggestion: eliminated
Error: sity Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: While this suggestion is problematic because there are some loopholes in this statemant, we should evaluate them carefully.
Error: statemant Suggestion: statement
Sentence: Maybe there was few private contributions which take trivial part in the whole funding, although the contributions increased, it could still take a small part which could not be very helpfu compared with the numbers in percent.
Error: helpfu Suggestion: helpful
Sentence: In addtion, the attendance in a concert doubled.
Error: addtion Suggestion: addition
Sentence: These two questions are significant to us because it generally charaterize this symphonies' appearance for us to make the evaluation for them.
Error: charaterize Suggestion: characterize
Sentence: In this wat, the city funding is essential for them.
Error: wat Suggestion: way
Sentence: On the other hand, there is a high possiblity that the are running not well while the actors and players need salaries to live.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Sentence: This is possible while we need futher infromation either.So we can not make conclusion that this increasing tickets price plan means they can support themselves.
Error: infromation Suggestion: information
Error: futher Suggestion: father
Sentence: Finally, I belive it is important to ask other comissioners with this suggestion.
Error: belive Suggestion: believe
Error: comissioners Suggestion: commissioners
Sentence: Because we do not know how many commissioners opine this idea.Besides is there other means of elimianting this funding is still in question, thus the author should make a survey of all the commssioners or make a discssion inviting all the people relates to this funding to make a more comprehensive plan.
Error: discssion Suggestion: discussion
Error: commssioners Suggestion: commissioners
Error: elimianting Suggestion: eliminating
Error: opine Suggestion: pine
Sentence: In conclusion, merely according to the evidence in the statement, the suggestion given by some commisioners is not compelling.
Error: commisioners Suggestion: commissioners
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
Read a good grammar book.
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 17 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 495 350
No. of Characters: 2463 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.717 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.976 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.786 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 162 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 133 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.522 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.069 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.652 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.291 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.533 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 319, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...cent last year as well as the attendance doubled in a concert last year. While th...
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Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rt increased dramatically by 200 percent , we do not know how much they contribute...
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Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: What's
...oncerts did the symphony hold annually? Whats more, whats the attendance of the other...
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Line 5, column 240, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...the symphony hold annually? Whats more, whats the attendance of the other concerts th...
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Line 5, column 392, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'symphonies'' or 'symphony's'?
Suggestion: symphonies'; symphony's
...s because it generally charaterize this symphonies appearance for us to make the evaluatio...
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Line 5, column 509, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'worse' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: worse
... only a few concerts the symphony held, more worse the attendance of other concerts were n...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 443, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...r hand, there is a high possiblity that the are running not well while the actors and p...
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Line 7, column 577, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...while we need futher infromation either.So we can not make conclusion that this in...
^^
Line 9, column 83, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ther comissioners with this suggestion. Because we do not know how many commissioners o...
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Line 9, column 145, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Besides
... how many commissioners opine this idea.Besides is there other means of elimianting thi...
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Line 11, column 318, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Secondly
...contribution details by the individuals.Secondly, the other commissioners advice are als...
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Line 11, column 338, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'commissioners'' or 'commissioner's'?
Suggestion: commissioners'; commissioner's
... by the individuals.Secondly, the other commissioners advice are also important.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, firstly, hence, if, likewise, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, in conclusion, as well as, for one thing, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 28.8173652695 184% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2532.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 492.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14634146341 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95843158345 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.457317073171 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 774.0 705.55239521 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.3293967245 57.8364921388 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.086956522 119.503703932 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3913043478 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.08695652174 5.70786347227 159% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209645503779 0.218282227539 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675267822063 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718438376338 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113614665406 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0907663367731 0.0628817314937 144% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.3799401198 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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