The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
“Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In the article the author ,Dr. Karp, states that the observation based approach of
studying cultures is invalid and the interview based approach is will establish much
more accurate understanding of child-bearing traditions in island cultures.
Dr. Karp comes to this conclusion based on the fact that in the recent interviews
conducted by him with children living in the group islands that include Tertia ,
children spend much more time talking bout thier biological parents than about
other adults in the village. However, the author makes the following three assumptions
First of all, the author assumes that the culture of tertia has not changed in the 20 years
since Dr. Field visited tertia. Perhaps the people of tertia have started to engage more in
rearing their own children and less in children of others.If this scenario has merit,
the argument will render invalid.
Secondly, the author assumes that the questions asked in the interview were pertinent to the
aspects of life of the children which the other adults took care of instead of the parents
.Maybe the child's education was looked after by the other adults while the physical and mental
health by the parents.If the above is true , the argument will hold no water
Third, the author assumes that the number of children interviewed was enough to generalize
for every child in tertia. There is a possibility that many of the children interviewed
were particularly attached to their parents in comparison to the majority of the children in
tertia.If the above scenario turns out to be true, the argument will be significantly weakened
In conclusion, the author's argument as it stands is heavily flawed due to its reliance on
several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to prove that these assumptions
are warranted through a systematic research study then maybe the argument can be
right
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 309 350
No. of Characters: 1537 1500
No. of Different Words: 162 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.193 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.974 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.599 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 115 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.083 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.414 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.721 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.117 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1612.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 306.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26797385621 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66602532064 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 204.123752495 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558823529412 0.468620217663 119% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 705.55239521 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 22.8473053892 188% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 113.375302353 57.8364921388 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 230.285714286 119.503703932 193% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.7142857143 23.324526521 187% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.2857142857 5.70786347227 250% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 22.0 5.15768463074 427% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 20.0 5.25449101796 381% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1649584851 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.084760829943 0.0743258471296 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0537570611653 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0481427369402 0.128457276422 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054101761872 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.2 14.3799401198 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.83 48.3550499002 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.197005988 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.17 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.74 8.32208582834 117% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.1389221557 172% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.9071856287 168% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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