The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist.
"Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
The article written by Dr.Karp states that the conclusion regarding the raising of children in Tertia
was not done by their biological parents,but rather by the entire village drawn from the observation-centred method of evaluation
carried out by Dr.Field is entirely invalid.He states his interaction with the children as an evidence stating
that since the children spent most of their time talking about their biological
parents that about the other adults,Dr.Fields conclusion is false.He also states that his interview-centred approach
would be more accurate in understanding the child rearing traditions rather than that of Dr.Field.But,Dr.Karps conclusion can be considered
valid only after validating the assumptions that Dr.Karps has made.
It has been mentioned in the article clearly that Dr.Karp has made interviews of many children living in a group of islands
which also included Tertia.But,it is not mentioned about the exact number of children who belongs to Tertia has been interviewd?We might
come to a conclusion only after knowing the exact proportion of Tertain children interviewed by him and by Dr.Field.There might also
be a case where say Dr.Karp might have interviwed 100 children out of which only 10 children belong to the Tertian Island.In such a case,the
conclusions made by Dr.Karp would hold no water.
Secondly,he also states that since he found the children talking more about their biological parents,
he came to a conclusion that they are not raised by the other adults of their village.We also cannot jump into the conclusion directly
because there might be a situation where the children are more home-sick and they speak more about their biological parents.There is also
a possibility where they are raised only by the other adults in the village and since they donot have a biological parents around,
they miss them very badly due to which they take their name in almost every sentence of theirs.
Thirdly,there is no proof that the theory of Dr.Field and Dr.Karp are comparable.The theory of Dr.Field has been stated twenty years ago before that of
Dr.Karp. We cannot assume that the same condition which prevailed twenty years ago when Dr.Field conducted the experiment prevails till date.Since they are not conducting
the experiment as the same time frame and the metrices and standards used by both of these anthropologists are not clearly mentioned,jumping into
a conclusion would be too extreme.
Thus,inorder to prove that the interview-based approach by Dr. Karp is the most accurate method,one must know about the exact proportion of tertian children.We must
also make sure that the children are no homesick due to missing of their biological parents,must also be aware of the metrics used by Dr.Field to evaluate the prompt.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 479 350
No. of Characters: 2284 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.678 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.768 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.638 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 142 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 53.222 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.303 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.421 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.794 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.179 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, regarding, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, thus, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 23.0 13.6137724551 169% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 28.8173652695 160% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2381.0 2260.96107784 105% => OK
No of words: 441.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39909297052 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13532061268 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460317460317 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 708.3 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 73.0 22.8473053892 320% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 201.479872168 57.8364921388 348% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 396.833333333 119.503703932 332% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 73.5 23.324526521 315% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 13.1666666667 5.70786347227 231% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 23.0 5.15768463074 446% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 46.0 5.25449101796 875% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283209881686 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153946113307 0.0743258471296 207% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0945766546097 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0874471829362 0.128457276422 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693631959243 0.0628817314937 110% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 40.8 14.3799401198 284% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -2.62 48.3550499002 -5% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 31.8 12.197005988 261% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 15.22 12.5979740519 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.52 8.32208582834 126% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 60.0 12.3882235529 484% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 31.2 11.1389221557 280% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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