The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper:
“In the first four years that Montoya has served as mayor of the city of San Perdito, the population has decreased and
the unemployment rate has increased. Two businesses have closed for each new business that has opened. Under
Varro, who served as mayor for four years before Montoya, the unemployment rate decreased and the population
increased. Clearly, the residents of San Perdito would be best served if they voted Montoya out of office and
reelected Varro.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
According the editorial section of the local newspaper, residents of San Perdito would be best served if they vote Montoya out of office and reelect Varro. Author's reason is based on the fact that unemployment rate decreased in spite of the population increase during the Varro tenure as mayor. Author is also stating that, during Montoya tenure, two businesses have closed for each new business and unemployment rate has increased during his tenure. In this line of reasoning, author fails to take into account various factors such as current economic condition, closure of factories due to technological advancement, etc. Hence, author needs to consider all these factors to affirm the conclusion.
First of all, current economic factors such as recession can be the sole reason for this observed phenomenon. Increased unemployment rate during Montoya tenure can be because of current geopolitical conditions such as recession which is affecting the overall unemployment rate and closure of businesses. In this case, Montoya's policies are not responsible for the observed economic conditions. Hence, just finding a correlation between unemployment rate and blaming that on Montoya is not a valid statement. Author needs to ascertain all the other factors to substantiate the stated claim.
Secondly, technologies are changing very fast, old factories are becoming irrelevant with advent of new technologies and automation. Closure of businesses during Montoya tenure can be due to above reasons, not because of Montoya policies. So reelecting Varro might not be helpful. Also, it might be the case that Montoya policies are responsible for opening of new businesses. His policies are helping to open new businesses and are controlling the increase in unemployment rate. Hence, author should also validate why businesses are getting closed and why new businesses are opening.
Also, closure of San Perdito businesses can be due to trade war with some other country. San Perdito economy might be export orientated and because of trade war with some other country, now businesses are not able to export and hence are getting closed. Because of this reason, people are migrating to different places to find new opportunities. So, reelecting Varro will not change anything.
Hence, there are multitude of factors that affect the current economic conditions, unemployment rates, closure of businesses, etc. Author needs to find the reason for increasing unemployment rate and closure of businesses to warrant his or her claim that residents of San Perdito would be best served if they reelect Varro.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, such as, first of all, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2204.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.42857142857 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86737170177 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455665024631 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 705.6 705.55239521 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.3616383134 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.181818182 119.503703932 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4545454545 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86363636364 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206617256605 0.218282227539 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633929838669 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620446613875 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126042488928 0.128457276422 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0575708898244 0.0628817314937 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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