The following appeared as an editorial in the student newspaper of Groveton College.
“To combat the recently reported dramatic rise in cheating amongcollege students, colleges and universities should adopt honor codes similar to Groveton’s, which calls for students to agree not to cheat in their academic endeavors and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated. Groveton’s honor code replaced an old-fashioned system in which teachers closely monitored students.
Under that system, teachers reported an average of thirty cases of cheating per year. The honor code has proven far more successful: in the first year it was in place, students reported twenty-one cases of cheating;
five years later, this figure had dropped to fourteen. Moreover, in a recent survey conducted by the Groveton honor council,a majority of students said that they would be less likely to cheat with an honor code in place than without.
“Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.”
The author suggests the school adopt honor code similar to Groveton’s in order to decrease cheating among students.However, readers need further proof to verify the argument offered by the author.
According to a recent report, cheating among college and university students is on the rise.However, more information about the report is needed.We have to know the exact number of the cheating case.For example, it may be more students in the college and university in the recent year, and this may be the reason why the cheating is on the rise.The author should at least tell us what percentage of the students are cheatings, and it will help us obtain a comprehensive understanding.
The honor code calls for students t agree not to cheat and to notify a faculty member if they suspect that others have cheated.The honor code is a moral regular system, and the author still need to proof there is no situation that students cover each other.For instance, students may pretend that they do not cheat ,because there is no teacher monitoring.Furthermore, students who are afraid of being bullied will chose not to speak out what they have noticed.
The argument accentuates that a majority of the students said that they would be less likely to cheat with the honor code than without.Sample survey should be able to represent all students .However, in the argument, we find no sign of such procedures for a random sample,and have good reasons to doubt if the sample is representative enough to reflect the general attitude of the students as a whole.Perhaps, the students who take the survey are good students, and they always focus on the test.
The author further indicates that cheating cases have dropped to 14 from 21 five years after the honor code was set in place.Here we need the figures between the first and fifth years.It is possible that the cheating numbers increase in the second year.In addition, we also need information about the trend of the enrollment duding the five years.If the total number of the students has dropped significantly during the past five years, then the number of cases will have surely decreased because of fewer students.The fact is not a sound evidence to draw a conclusion that the honor code reduce the cheating numbers.
To make the argument more convincing, the author would have to provide more information as above mentioned.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 7 15
No. of Words: 413 350
No. of Characters: 1929 1500
No. of Different Words: 196 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.508 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.671 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.42 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 132 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 59 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 31.469 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.48 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.918 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.222 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, at least, for example, for instance, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02518891688 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89858225452 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.501259445844 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 612.0 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 66.0 22.8473053892 289% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 179.974689579 57.8364921388 311% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 332.5 119.503703932 278% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 66.1666666667 23.324526521 284% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.5 5.70786347227 342% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285622166591 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137844355349 0.0743258471296 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0863782277305 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137844355349 0.128457276422 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0863782277305 0.0628817314937 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 35.3 14.3799401198 245% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 12.95 48.3550499002 27% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.1628742515 181% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 27.9 12.197005988 229% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.78 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.37 8.32208582834 125% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 12.3882235529 226% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 28.4 11.1389221557 255% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 11.9071856287 235% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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