The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company According to a recent report from our marketing department during the past year fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any ot

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The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company.”
“According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public’s lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.”
“Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.”;

In the memo, it is stated that company should invest more money on the advertising. The author has come to this conclusion that they can allocate a greater share of its budget through advertising.Although at first glance, the author's conclusion appears to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that it is based on unwarranted evidence.

First of all, the author said the number of people who attended Super Screen-produced movies decline.However, what is the exact number of the attendees people between the two years?The author did not present the statistics of by how many people attended movies decline.Perhaps the author is presenting his personal views.Even if what comes into conclusion is logical and true.One the other hand, even if he was presenting the official data, the author did not mention that the data was conducted by a trustworthy insitution.Even it was conducted by a trustworthy insitution it is possible that the cardinal reason of the decline is not related to the lack of the awareness of the movies.It is more likely people prefer to see the movie on NETFILX.

Furthermore, was there big movies last year ?It is possible that there were big movies last year and they went to see the big movies.It is the reason that people did not choose the Super Screen-produced movies last year.As a result, the positive reviews were less than this year.

In addition, what is the excet number of the positive reviews?For example, it may be two positive reviews last year and four positive reviews this years.Comparing the two years, the positive reviews are still too less to be considerate as a reason to increase the advertising

In conclusion, the author should strength his conclusion after answering these questions. If the author is able to provide more reliable data for the above assumptions and offer more evidence, then it will be possible to come into the author's conclusion.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1614.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 316.0 441.139720559 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10759493671 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06325190894 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 204.123752495 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487341772152 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 52.0 22.8473053892 228% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 212.273932036 57.8364921388 367% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 269.0 119.503703932 225% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 52.6666666667 23.324526521 226% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.0 5.70786347227 368% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146363032268 0.218282227539 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675921267671 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0735869712566 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0744968605081 0.128457276422 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0766491711966 0.0628817314937 122% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 29.0 14.3799401198 202% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 18.7 48.3550499002 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.6 12.197005988 193% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.25 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 22.8 11.1389221557 205% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 29.0 11.9071856287 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 328 350
No. of Characters: 1565 1500
No. of Different Words: 150 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.256 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.771 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.618 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 114 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 31 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 41 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 21.943 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.439 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.795 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5