The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend—the city-run public schools—comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools—even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Based on the evidence that Parson City spent a larger proportion of tax revenue on public schools than Blue City and the fact that the financial source of these schools are mainly city funding, the author asserts that residents in Parson city value public school education more than residents in Blue City. After careful inspection of the argument I find that some information is missing in justifying the author's claim.
To begin with, a critical point the author makes in the argument in support for his claim is that the population in the two cities are about the same. An unstated induction from this fact is that there are approximately same number of students attending public schools. However, this is not necessarily the case. It is well likely that the Blue City is an aged society where the elder citizens consists the main population. In this case, not as many public schools would be needed in Blue City as in Parson City, as there are simply not as many people attending the school. Without any evidence showing that the need for public school resources are on the same level in two cities, the author's claim remians dubious.
Even the evidence for the above-mentioned points are justified, the reasoning still remains doubtful, as the author did not provide any evidence indicating the current level of development of public schools in the two cities. Another possibly reason that Parson City invest a larger amount of butget on developing public schools is that there was a shortage of educational resources previously in the city. In contrast, the public education system might already been well established an grown mature in Blue City, which means that it does not need much input to improving it anymore. In this case, we could not infer that Parson City are placing more value on the betterment of public school, as the larget spent only reflect a more urgent need. Therefore, to make the argument more convincing, the author need to provide evidence on the current development of public schools in the two cities.
Moreover, the author simply equate the govenment's input to public schools with the residents' value in good education in these schools. Apparently, he/she overlooks the possibility that the decision made by the officials does not always reflect the opinion of the public. To establish a sound logic between the policy and the residents' value, the author need to show that the decision of the budgetary distribution is determined at least partly by the citizens.
In conclusion, the author fails to provide enough information on the need for inputting money to public schools in two cities, such as how many citizens fall in schooling age in each city or how the public schools have been developed so far. In addition, he/she fails to illustrate the arbitary link between the government's determination and the value of the citizens. Without these information, the claim that residents in Parson City are regarding the public school education as more valueble than people in Blue City cannot be justified.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Without any evidence showing that the need for public school resources are on the same level in two cities, the author's claim remians dubious.
Error: remians Suggestion: remains
Sentence: Another possibly reason that Parson City invest a larger amount of butget on developing public schools is that there was a shortage of educational resources previously in the city.
Error: butget Suggestion: budget
Sentence: In this case, we could not infer that Parson City are placing more value on the betterment of public school, as the larget spent only reflect a more urgent need.
Error: larget Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: In addition, he/she fails to illustrate the arbitary link between the government's determination and the value of the citizens.
Error: arbitary Suggestion: arbitrary
Sentence: Without these information, the claim that residents in Parson City are regarding the public school education as more valueble than people in Blue City cannot be justified.
Error: valueble Suggestion: valuable
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 6
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 510 350
No. of Characters: 2489 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.752 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.88 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.549 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.842 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.566 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.632 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.361 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 308, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “After” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ation more than residents in Blue City. After careful inspection of the argument I fi...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 485, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...tem might already been well established an grown mature in Blue City, which means ...
^^
Line 9, column 313, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...llustrate the arbitary link between the governments determination and the value of the citi...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 378, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
... and the value of the citizens. Without these information, the claim that residents in Parson Cit...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, however, if, look, moreover, regarding, so, still, therefore, well, at least, in addition, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 16.3942115768 159% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2543.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 508.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00590551181 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74751043592 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59795017729 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433070866142 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 799.2 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8844164493 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.842105263 119.503703932 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7368421053 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.31578947368 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.277674159751 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933892311044 0.0743258471296 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0860387525828 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184810431129 0.128457276422 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0811928650378 0.0628817314937 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.