The following appeared in a letter to the editor of Parson City's local newspaper.
"In our region of Trillura, the majority of money spent on the schools that most students attend — the city-run public schools — comes from taxes that each city government collects. The region's cities differ, however, in the budgetary priority they give to public education. For example, both as a proportion of its overall tax revenues and in absolute terms, Parson City has recently spent almost twice as much per year as Blue City has for its public schools — even though both cities have about the same number of residents. Clearly, Parson City residents place a higher value on providing a good education in public schools than Blue City residents do."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The above synopsis of the letter of Parson City's local newspaper argues that Parson city residents place higher value on providing good education than Blue city residents as Parson city recently spent twice the amount on public schools than Blue city. This argument is rife with holes as it rests on some unsubstantiated assumptions and is unpersuasive as it stands.
The above paragraph states that Parson City has recently spent twice than Blue City on Public schools even though the population of residents is same. Above claims is flawed as same number of residents doesn't imply same number of students in both the cities. Parson city might be having high ratio of students as compared to Blue city. It is therefore vague to compare the amount spent on public schools with respect to residents. This assumption is fallacious as it does not have solid ground.
The above argument also states that as Parson city is spending more money than Blue city on public schools it is placing higher value on education. The above statement is incorrect as spending money doesn't place value on education rather dedicated learning process plays a vital role in placing value to education. Blue city might have the modern day facilities like projectors , audio systems in the schools and Parson city might be divested by these modern day technologies therefore to incorporate these technologies Parson City migth have spent more money than Blue City.
The people of Blue city believe that as Parson City is spending more on public education it is placing higher value on good education.This statement is false as the argument nowhere talks about the results of the students.There is a possibility that although Parson city is spending more money on education but Blue City students are performing well in academics.It is important to understand that only hardwork and dedication can produce good results.Unless and until the outcome is known it would be unfair to assert about the value of education.
The above synopsis of the letter of Parson City's local newspaper doesn't provide enough documents and evidence to bolster its argument. Without enough evidence it creates a wishful impression on the reader and remains unsubstantiative. It could have been a better argument if proper statistics report and evidence would be attached with the letter.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 389 350
No. of Characters: 1935 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.441 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.974 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.556 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.933 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.23 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.333 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.611 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...esidents place higher value on providing good education than Blue city residents ...
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...nts place higher value on providing good education than Blue city residents as P...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...t on public schools than Blue city. This argument is rife with holes as it rests ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Argument
...public schools than Blue city. This argument is rife with holes as it rests on some ...
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Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ic schools even though the population of residents is same. Above claims is flawe...
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...hools even though the population of residents is same. Above claims is flawed as same...
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...s is flawed as same number of residents doesnt imply same number of students in both t...
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Line 11, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ore vague to compare the amount spent on public schools with respect to residents...
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...ague to compare the amount spent on public schools with respect to residents. This...
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Line 15, column 134, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ublic schools it is placing higher value on education. The above statement is inc...
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... schools it is placing higher value on education. The above statement is incor...
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Line 17, column 66, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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...tatement is incorrect as spending money doesnt place value on education rather dedicat...
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Line 17, column 124, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
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Suggestion: to process
... on education rather dedicated learning process plays a vital role in placing value...
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Line 17, column 131, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...cation rather dedicated learning process plays a vital role in placing value to e...
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...n rather dedicated learning process plays a vital role in placing value to educat...
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Line 19, column 113, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...he modern day facilities like projectors , audio systems in the schools and Pa...
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Line 19, column 132, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ities like projectors , audio systems in the schools and Parson city might be div...
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Line 21, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...to incorporate these technologies Parson City migth have spent more money than Bl...
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Line 25, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ation it is placing higher value on good education.This statement is false as the...
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Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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... it is placing higher value on good education.This statement is false as the argument...
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...cing higher value on good education.This statement is false as the argument nowh...
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...talks about the results of the students.There is a possibility that although Pars...
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Line 27, column 126, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...the students.There is a possibility that although Parson city is spending more mo...
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Line 29, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
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Suggestion: Although
...tudents.There is a possibility that although Parson city is spending more money on e...
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Line 29, column 114, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: It
...udents are performing well in academics.It is important to understand that onl...
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Line 29, column 132, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...ing well in academics.It is important to understand that only hardwork and dedica...
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...ell in academics.It is important to understand that only hardwork and dedication can p...
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Suggestion: Unless
...and dedication can produce good results.Unless and until the outcome is known it would...
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Line 31, column 71, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Unless” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and dedication can produce good results.Unless and until the outcome is known it would...
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Line 31, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...e outcome is known it would be unfair to assert about the value of education. ...
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Line 35, column 66, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
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... letter of Parson Citys local newspaper doesnt provide enough documents and evidence t...
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...gh documents and evidence to bolster its argument. Without enough evidence it cre...
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Line 37, column 131, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...s unsubstantiative. It could have been a better argument if proper statistics rep...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, with respect to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30890052356 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71223202884 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.426701570681 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 627.3 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 123.578880865 57.8364921388 214% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 144.857142857 119.503703932 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.2857142857 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.64285714286 5.70786347227 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 20.0 5.15768463074 388% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 36.0 5.25449101796 685% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255271441018 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10082009912 0.0743258471296 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0865775197023 0.0701772020484 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0931373064731 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.080527529145 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.5979740519 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 98.500998004 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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