The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom w

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The following appeared in a letter from a homeowner to a friend.

Of the two leading real estate firms in our town—Adams Realty and Fitch Realty—Adams Realty is clearly superior. Adams has 40 real estate agents; in contrast, Fitch has 25, many of whom work only part-time. Moreover, Adams' revenue last year was twice as high as that of Fitch and included home sales that averaged $168,000, compared to Fitch's $144,000. Homes listed with Adams sell faster as well: ten years ago I listed my home with Fitch, and it took more than four months to sell; last year, when I sold another home, I listed it with Adams, and it took only one month. Thus, if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price, you should use Adams Realty.

The assumption of the homeowner is written in the memo that Adams Realty can sell homes quickly and at a good price sounds illogically convincing in several reasons. The Vice president ignored important information and some questions needed to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted results.

First, the author assumes that the productivity of a company can be determined with the number of agent and regular workers, therefor; he concludes that Adams is better choice compared Fitch. However, efficiency in this kind of business depend plenty of factors such as experience works, methods of selling, or even advertising. I fact, it is possible many of workers in Adams are novice, so they are not familiar with ways of selling homes, which can decrease productivity of Adams considerably. Without considering these possible scenarios, the author can not justifiably conclude that Fitch can not sale homes quickly.

Second, serious of problems with the argument arises from the scant information on which it relies. The author comparing the average cost of the home is sold by these estate firms, and concludes that Adams gains more profits. Nevertheless, for measuring the profit we need the number of sold homes by each of these estate firms as well as the costs of their service fee. In this way, the author can not conclude Adams can gain more profits, because the does not provide statistical sufficient information.

In the third place, the author for supports his recommendation cites a memory about selling two homes in different the time condition. It is entirely possible that ten years ago the demand for purchasing home was too low, because the few number of people who live in the city. However, the condition can be different in last years and increasing the population of city lead to increase the selling home. In addition, the author does not mention any information about two homes, which may have not any similarity. It is quite possible that the first home was located in downtown, where it is usually difficult to sells home at good price, while the second homes was in the better zone. In short, since the argument relies on the limited information, I can not take the author’s conclusion seriously.

In sum, the argument is flawed logically and therefore unconvincing. To strengthen the argument, the author must provide more statistical information about the number of homes, which was soled with these estate firms. To evaluate better the recommendation, it would be know about all effective factors in selling homes.

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Average: 6.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 235, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun number seems to be countable; consider using: 'few numbers'.
Suggestion: few numbers
...urchasing home was too low, because the few number of people who live in the city. However...
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Discourse Markers used:
['first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'nevertheless', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'third', 'well', 'while', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in short', 'kind of', 'such as', 'as well as', 'in the third place']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.257322175732 0.25644967241 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.146443514644 0.15541462614 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0753138075314 0.0836205057962 90% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0606694560669 0.0520304965353 117% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0271966527197 0.0272364105082 100% => OK
Prepositions: 0.138075313808 0.125424944231 110% => OK
Participles: 0.0439330543933 0.0416121511921 106% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79529952089 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0146443514644 0.026700313972 55% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.115062761506 0.113004496875 102% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0251046025105 0.0255425247493 98% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0146443514644 0.0127820249294 115% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2610.0 2731.13054187 96% => OK
No of words: 427.0 446.07635468 96% => OK
Chars per words: 6.11241217799 6.12365571057 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.57801047555 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.374707259953 0.378187486979 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.269320843091 0.287650121315 94% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.196721311475 0.208842608468 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131147540984 0.135150697306 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79529952089 2.79052419416 100% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 207.018472906 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524590163934 0.469332199767 112% => OK
Word variations: 59.8405507573 52.1807786196 115% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 20.039408867 95% => OK
Sentence length: 22.4736842105 23.2022227129 97% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.4208172479 57.7814097925 51% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.368421053 141.986410481 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4736842105 23.2022227129 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.724660767414 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 49.4057685197 51.9672348444 95% => OK
Elegance: 1.875 1.8405768891 102% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355627900566 0.441005458295 81% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.10820598696 0.135418324435 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0651872921844 0.0829849096947 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.607238001625 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.101388520012 0.147661913831 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155293259059 0.193483328276 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055556483265 0.0970749176394 57% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.453189746022 0.42659136922 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.105441165714 0.0774707102158 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252684958817 0.312017818177 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0339413590087 0.0698173142475 49% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.33743842365 132% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.87684729064 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.82512315271 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 6.46551724138 155% => OK
Negative topic words: 6.0 5.36822660099 112% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.82389162562 71% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.