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The following appeared in a letter from the owner of the Sunnyside Towers apartment complex to its manager.

"One month ago, all the showerheads in the first three buildings of the Sunnyside Towers complex were modified to restrict maximum water flow to one-third
of what it used to be. Although actual readings of water usage before and after the adjustment are not yet available, the change will obviously result in
a considerable savings for Sunnyside Corporation, since the corporation must pay for water each month. Except for a few complaints about low water pressure,
no problems with showers have been reported since the adjustment. I predict that modifying showerheads to restrict water flow throughout all twelve buildings
in the Sunnyside Towers complex will increase our profits even more dramatically."

Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the prediction and the argument on which it is
based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the prediction.

The whole argument is based on prediction that the water usage after the adjustment has reduced which might not be true. Decreasing the
maximum water flow doesn't imply that water consumption will be less. Residents of Sunnyside tower complex might have consumed the same amount of water which
was consumed before but with slower rate (because of decrease in maximum water flow). Slower rate of water flow might have been inconvenient for usage which
might cause residents to use higher volume of water than earlier. Factors such as leakage in showerheads or water consumptions other than showerhead haven't been considered.
Consumption of water in summer is more compared to other seasons. Therefore, residents might have used more water compared to last month

The number of residents is also not specified. There might be lesser number of residents before the adjustment. Increase in number of residents will result in increase of
water consumption. All these factors should be considered in predicting the reading of water usage. If there is increase in water usage Sunnyside corporation might not
be able to save the money.

The letter specifies about the only complaint is low water pressure but this might not be the only problem faced by the residents. Other issues might have not
been reported yet. They should consider a reliable feedback from every resident before concluding that the only complaint is low water pressure. If the modification is
faulty there might have been complete reduction in water flow or there might be excess water flow. These inconveniences might
lead residents to evacuate the complex. This might decrease the income and corporation will not be able to save the money. Also, the money spent for modification
is not specified. If the cost used for modification is higher than the predicted savings, there will be loss.

The letter states that similar pattern in all the other buildings will increase profit. This is based on the prediction that all the buildings are the same. The
other buildings might not have shower heads. There might be a possibility that maximum water flow in the other building's showerheads cannot be modified. Also, charges
on water might have increased due to fluctuation in economy. In this case, corporation would have to pay higher price than before.

Therefore, without considering these various factors and evidences, it cannot be concluded that there will be savings or increase in profit.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: doesn't
...rue. Decreasing the maximum water flow doesnt imply that water consumption will be le...
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... consumed the same amount of water which was consumed before but with slower rate...
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...t have been inconvenient for usage which might cause residents to use higher volu...
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...ater consumptions other than showerhead havent been considered. Consumption of water ...
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... predicting the reading of water usage. If there is increase in water usage Sunnys...
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...er usage Sunnyside corporation might not be able to save the money. The lette...
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...e residents. Other issues might have not been reported yet. They should consider ...
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...w water pressure. If the modification is faulty there might have been complete re...
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...s water flow. These inconveniences might lead residents to evacuate the complex. ...
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.... Also, the money spent for modification is not specified. If the cost used for m...
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...that all the buildings are the same. The other buildings might not have shower he...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.6327345309 148% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.9520958084 208% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2090.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 399.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2380952381 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62789095914 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 204.123752495 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421052631579 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.0 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.1577632865 57.8364921388 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 80.3846153846 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.3461538462 23.324526521 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.42307692308 5.70786347227 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 17.0 5.15768463074 330% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.67664670659 257% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143803444568 0.218282227539 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499533748256 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0468492760517 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.058828534768 0.128457276422 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574540838425 0.0628817314937 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.52 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments