The following appeared in a magazine article on trends and lifestyles:
“In general, people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and
fatty cheeses. Walk into the Heart’s Delight, a store that started selling organic fruits and vegetables and whole-grain
flours in the 1960’s, and you will also find a wide selection of cheeses made with high butterfat content. Next door,
the owners of the Good Earth Café, an old vegetarian restaurant, are still making a modest living, but the owners of
the new House of Beef across the street are millionaires.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.
The author is stating that in general, people are nowadays not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. Author substantiates the claim by stating that a wide selection of cheeses made with high butterfat content can be found in a 1960's store, also the author states that owners of some old vegetarian restaurant are still making a modest living whereas the owners of a new House of Beef are millionaires. In the line of reasoning author fails to take into account various reasons and factors that might account for the above-mentioned observations. Because of these missing reasons author's claim sound dubious and unwarranted.
First of all, having a wide selection of cheese does not mean that people are actually buying the cheeses. Also, it might be the case that store serves very few people each having different requirement of type of the cheese. Hence, store has to keep a wide selection of cheeses to cater to its few customers. Also, there is no information given regarding the amount of cheese sold. Store might be keeping few grams of each wide selection of cheeses and in the end, might be selling only some kgs. Hence, the author needs to take into account the amount of cheese that is sold now compared to amount of cheese sold a decade ago. Having a wide selection of cheese does not mean that store is selling greater amount of cheese.
Secondly, the author fails to take into account the type of customers that Good Earth Cafe and House of Beef might be catering. Good Earth Cafe might be for low level income group people with each dish costing some dollars, hence owners might be making a modest living. On the other hand, House of Beef might be catering to super rich people and each dish in this restaurant might be thousands of dollars each, hence, owners are millionaires. So, the author should look into the type of customers served by two restaurants and also the number of customers that House of Beef is serving. House of Beef might be serving very few customers, but because of higher cost of each dish, owners of House of Beef are millionaires.
Third thing, the author mentions owners of the new House of Beef restaurant not the profit of House of Beef. It might be the case that owners of House of Beef are engaged in some other business adventure and that business is the reason that owners are millionaires. The author should take into account the actual customers coming to House of Beef and actual profit made my House of Beef, only then author can conclude the number of people coming to House of Beef and whether people are concerned or not about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses.
As the author fails to take into account various reasons which can be possible explanation for the above mentioned observation, the claim made by the author seems to be dubious and too rosy. For Heart's Delight store the author should look into the amount of cheese that is actually sold to come to a sound conclusion. To find the actually reason for difference between earning of Good Earth Cafe and House of Beef, author needs to take into account the type of customers and profit of House of Beef, not whether its owners are millionaires or not.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 211, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Delight) must be used with a third-person verb: 'stores'.
Suggestion: stores
...ubious and too rosy. For Hearts Delight store the author should look into the amount ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, look, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, then, third, whereas, as to, in general, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.6327345309 158% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 90.0 55.5748502994 162% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2689.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 572.0 441.139720559 130% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70104895105 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89045207381 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39629328386 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.351398601399 0.468620217663 75% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 830.7 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.0436652407 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.227272727 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 23.324526521 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.13636363636 5.70786347227 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.110590057264 0.218282227539 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0476007452943 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0877008704624 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.077094486363 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0445067089588 0.0628817314937 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.28 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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