The following appeared in a magazine article on trends and lifestyles:“In general, people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. Walk into the Heart’s Delight, a store that started s

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The following appeared in a magazine article on trends and lifestyles:

“In general, people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about regulating their intake of red meat and fatty cheeses. Walk into the Heart’s Delight, a store that started selling organic fruits and vegetables and whole-grain flours in the 1960’s, and you will also find a wide selection of cheeses made with high butterfat content. Next door, the owners of the Good Earth Café, an old vegetarian restaurant, are still making a modest living, but the owners of the new House of Beef across the street are millionaires.”

Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.

The author of an article, publishes in the magazine, argues that people are not as concerned as they were a decade ago about the red meat and cheeses.To support his argument the author provides as evidence the details of the store to show that the consumption of cheese has increased. Furthermore, the author adds the comparisons of an old café and the new house of beef to show that increase in consumption of red meat. Though the underlying argument certainly has merit because of lack of evidence, weak assumptions, vague language the author's argument is unsubstantiated and deeply flawed. some of the flaws are as follows.

First, the author while stating as evidence of the details of store and the wide choice of fatty cheeses made at the store has falsely assumed that the cheese purchased at the store is entirely consumed by the purchaser. For example, if the purchased cheese by the customer is purchased in high measure because he may have a party arranged at his house or he is a supplier of cheese for a small town which is located far away from the city and has not stores selling cheese.

Second, the author while stating the evidence for increase in consumption of red meat has made wrong comparison between an old café and the new house of beef by taking into consideration the standard of the living.For example, if the owner of the good earth café is a old man and believes in keeping things simple and has not invested a lot in the infrastructure of the café but has a good customer history , customer relations and the good earth café is doing well on that factors.

Third, the author while stating that owners of the new house of beef are millionaires has wrongly assumed that they are doing well in new setup. For Instance, if the owner has set this as a secondary business and has his funds coming from the primary business. So stating the he being a millionaire is because of the new setup is entirely wrong . Therefore, the comparison of the standard of living with the consumption of red meat is at fault.

Although as written the argument is categorically unconvincing, the author could strengthen his position were he to add some proof regarding the stated evidences for the consumption of red meat and cheese, and some statistical evidence for showing that there has been increase in the quantity of consumption. if he had further clarified the limits based on the situation, then the argument's reasoning would have been much improved. however, without these changes, the argument is implausible and the reasoning faulty.

In the conclusion, the author presents a interesting but flawed argument. Had the author presented some statistical proof showing the increase in consumption and the more information mentioned above, the argument would have been persuasive. As it stands however the author's argument is too weak to be true. Hence, I remain unconvinced.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, third, well, while, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 16.3942115768 152% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2436.0 2260.96107784 108% => OK
No of words: 493.0 441.139720559 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94117647059 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78297328629 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438133874239 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 752.4 705.55239521 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 111.958449634 57.8364921388 194% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.333333333 119.503703932 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.3888888889 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0843400819397 0.218282227539 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0265580258049 0.0743258471296 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490069678926 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0453321480815 0.128457276422 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428973018839 0.0628817314937 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 98.500998004 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 495 350
No. of Characters: 2351 1500
No. of Different Words: 208 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.717 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.749 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.68 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 164 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 127 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.938 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.745 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.622 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.139 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5