Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's rec

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Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and citing a nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs, the station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.

The author of an article argues that radio station wcqp share of radio audience has increased significantly due to introduction of the call-in program two years ago at the radio station. By acknowledging the above data along with citing the nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are interested in such call-in programs . The author also adds the recommendation given by station manager of kick in Medway saying that the station should add more call-in programs in trying to gain a large audience share. The author's underlying argument certainly has merits but due to some weak assumptions and vague language the author's argument is unsubstantiated and deeply flawed . here are some flaws stated below.

Firstly, Since the author has not stated that the call-in program was the only program introduced two years ago, the author cannot give the entire credit of the increase in the radio audience to the call-in program. For example, if there were four programs that had started couple of years back. The reason behind the increase in radio audience may have been some other program introduced two years back.

Secondly, the author talks about the nationwide survey conducted and the survey indicating that the radio listeners are interested in the call-in programs. The author here fails to add the number of people involved in the survey . For instance if there are a total of 1 lakh radio listeners nationwide, the number of people participated in the survey were about ten thousand . so this clearly shows that this is not a generalized opinion for the call-in program as the number of radio listeners involved in the survey is just 10% of the total radio listeners nationwide.

Thirdly, the author states that with the help of nationwide survey and the success story of the radio station wcqp , the station manager at kick is saying that the station should add more call-in programs to increase the number of radio listeners . The author has not shown any connection or proof for the above statement . For example, station manager at kick has some different reason to start the call-in program . The reason for the introduction may be to stand in the competition with the radio station wcqp .

Although as written the argument is unconvincing . The author could strengthen his argument by showing the survey statistics , by adding the details of the new programs introduced in the past two years by the radio station wcqp , by showing some data showing the exact reason behind introduction at kick to be the success story of radio station wcqp and the nationwide survey, then the argument's reasoning would have significantly improved . however, without these changes the argument remains weak and the reasoning flawed.

In the conclusion, the author presents a interesting but flawed argument . Had the author cited some important data as supporting evidence along with the additional information mentioned above , the argument would have been persuasive . As it stands however the author's argument is too weak to be true . Hence , I remain unconvinced.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, for example, for instance

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 55.5748502994 130% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2567.0 2260.96107784 114% => OK
No of words: 499.0 441.139720559 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14428857715 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69927048566 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.394789579158 0.468620217663 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 783.9 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 80.65755285 57.8364921388 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.608695652 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6956521739 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26086956522 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 27.0 5.25449101796 514% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313474285945 0.218282227539 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982060852936 0.0743258471296 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11164953601 0.0701772020484 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183353672071 0.128457276422 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101641088416 0.0628817314937 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 14.3799401198 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.27 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 499 350
No. of Characters: 2517 1500
No. of Different Words: 191 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.726 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.044 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.615 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 192 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 87 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.95 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 17.186 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.606 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.127 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5