The following appeared in a memo from the vice president of a food distribution company with food storage warehouses in several cities.
"Recently, we signed a contract with the Fly-Away Pest Control Company to provide pest control services at our fast-food warehouse in Palm City, but last month we discovered that over $20,000 worth of food there had been destroyed by pest damage. Meanwhile, the Buzzoff Pest Control Company, which we have used for many years, continued to service our warehouse in Wintervale, and last month only $10,000 worth of the food stored there had been destroyed by pest damage. Even though the price charged by Fly-Away is considerably lower, our best means of saving money is to return to Buzzoff for all our pest control services."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The vice president of a food distribution company claims that Buzzoff Pest Control Company is better than Fly-Away Pest Control Company and it corroborates evidence that less disturbance from the food storage, Buzzfeed is more considerable to save money, comparison between those two companies. However, there are four aspects of unsubstantiated evidences that affect the argument negatively.
First of all, there is no specific evidence that the amount of the food. Fly-Away Pest Control Company uses pest control in Palm City whereas Buzzoff Pest Control Company uses pest control in Wintervale. Vice president of a Food distribution company is only showing the evidence that Fly-Away disturbs $20,000, but Buzzoff wastes $10,000. However, it didn’t show any data or statistics about the amount of food in Palm city or Wintervale.
Moreover, there is no evidence that the weather of each city. Pest control system is for preserving the food so that it doesn’t make any disturbance from pest or bacteria-related. Probably because Palm City is more humid and favorable to pest viability, then it will surely affect the food distribution while Wintervale warehouse doesn’t have any problem with pest.
Furthermore, there is no such evidence that the inspectors of determining about money waste of food disturbance. Probably one inspector from Wintervale is more generous than the inspector from the Palm city. Even inspectors are same format of the evaluation, but the format can be flexible at some circumstances. Therefore, there should be specific evidence about the even-handed data about those two company behavior.
Last but least, there is no specific evidence that Buzzoff is better considerable investment than the Fly-Away. Food storage is the place of preservation. However, if Buzzoff investment is about four times more than the Fly-Away, then it becomes more problematic, Vice president tried to save the money, but then it causes the more money to spend on the Buzzoff. Hence, there should be exact usage of money on the investment of pest control company.
Conclusively, the argument concludes that Buzzoff Pest Control Company is better than Fly-Away Pest Control Company with unproven explanation. However, if vice president of food distribution adduces the explanations above, then the argument will be more cogent to understand.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, whereas, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 16.3942115768 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2010.0 2260.96107784 89% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49180327869 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97521287741 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415300546448 0.468620217663 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 633.6 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.5023894572 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.789473684 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2631578947 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47368421053 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405130181458 0.218282227539 186% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.13327210618 0.0743258471296 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114931527803 0.0701772020484 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.252971677737 0.128457276422 197% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11219204788 0.0628817314937 178% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.3550499002 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 98.500998004 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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