According to the authors of the article published in the business magazine, the Mentian prosper executives on whom they have studied draw that they have slept less than 6 hours per night which is the major reason for their success that they’ve achieved. However, the conclusion made by the authors might hold the water, it rests upon several unfounded assumptions that if not substantiated might dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument.
The conclusion drawn by the authors is based on the study undertook by that encompasses only 300 Mentian executives. But the question arises- Is it the satisfactory number of workers that they have studied upon to make such an argument?. It is Universally accepted that sleeping is the humane way to refresh the mind. The authors didn’t touch the area where the people who are successful sleep more than 6 hours. Because for many people, sleep is the factor that gives the peace of mind to begin the day with a fresh sense. Thus, if this acumen of thought is true, then the assertion made by the authors that less sleep tends to ascend them to the apogee of the profit margin is significantly hampered.
Prosperity of the business can be mapped with many factors. The author of the section published in the magazine can be questioned that if they have considered other factors as well. The hard work by the employees, punctuality that they have, robustness of the product they produce and so on have the greater possibility of affecting the success and the profit rate of the business. More over, the business rate is highly dependent on market values of the product as well. For instance the company which has the executives who sleep well can come up with the better acumen can take their company to the summit of success. In this case the author should be interested in conducting study over other characteristics of the employee (executives) in order to bring the credibility to their argument.
Many companies like Google, Amazon which are known as the leading business corporations in the world inculcate the habit of sanctioning the sleep hours for their employee. The work place even consists of the sleeping areas as well for the employees. Despite of this “sleep affairs” these companies are unprecedented by any other companies in their market value as well as profit rate. Hence author of the given particular passage has to consider these examples as well before coming on to the point of more sleep affecting the success rate in an ill manner.
In a nutshell, while the author of the may have come to a second conclusion regarding the increase in success rate of the business giving the credits to only the Mentian executives who sleep less than 6 hours if more data is needed before a firm conclusion is reached. If the author rethinks the question if it is the sufficient number of executives to research on? Or if sleep is the only attribute of the executives to contribute to the success of the business and also think and consider about the higher success rate of the companies where they do not practice what author implicates via his/her study, then it will be possible to fully evaluate the validity of the argument.
Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 550 350
No. of Characters: 2601 1500
No. of Different Words: 236 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.843 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.729 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.595 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 171 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 130 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 90 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 55 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.19 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.566 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.619 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.529 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.1 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
According to the authors of the article ...
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Line 7, column 397, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ir market value as well as profit rate. Hence author of the given particular passage ...
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Line 7, column 552, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an ill manner" with adverb for "ill"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...f more sleep affecting the success rate in an ill manner. In a nutshell, while the au...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g the success rate in an ill manner. In a nutshell, while the author of the ...
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Line 9, column 47, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... In a nutshell, while the author of the may have come to a second conclusion reg...
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Line 9, column 690, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... evaluate the validity of the argument.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 13.6137724551 140% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 55.5748502994 142% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2680.0 2260.96107784 119% => OK
No of words: 547.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89945155393 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7114223097 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 204.123752495 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4478976234 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 840.6 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 66.0152528242 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.619047619 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0476190476 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47619047619 5.70786347227 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 8.20758483034 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248561697022 0.218282227539 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765010801456 0.0743258471296 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0490935225184 0.0701772020484 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152970787856 0.128457276422 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0313312851738 0.0628817314937 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 98.500998004 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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