The following appeared as part of an article in a business magazine.
"A recent study rating 300 male and female Mentian advertising executives according to the average number of hours they sleep per night showed an association between the amount of sleep the executives need and the success of their firms. Of the advertising firms studied, those whose executives reported needing no more than 6 hours of sleep per night had higher profit margins and faster growth. These results suggest that if a business wants to prosper, it should hire only people who need less than 6 hours of sleep per night."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The argument that businesses should only hire people that need less than 6 hours of sleep may seem logical at first. Despite making some good points, the argument is based on numerous unwarranted assumptions that weaken the author’s argument.
The author assumes that if businesses hire people who need less than six hours of sleep, they will have “higher profit margins and faster growth.” The author fails to provide evidence that sleep and success are related. Although the author cites a study, perhaps success was due to higher education and better ideas from the executive. Furthermore, success can also come from a better support team from co-workers. While the executive is sleeping, the rest of the staff might be picking up the slack. Had the author provided better proof to why he made this assumption, his argument might have been strengthened.
The author also leaves some unanswered questions that weaken his case. For example, are all the firms studied, equal? If the firms differ, this might explain the higher profits and growth. The author should provide details of the study in order to strengthen his argument.
Furthermore, the author claims that if a business wants to prosper, they must hire only people that need less than six hours of sleep. The studies, however, were performed on executives in firms. The author should cite a study that included all business and different types of employees, other than just executives, this information could strengthen or weaken the argument.
With so many unwarranted assumptions the author fails to make a convincing case. If the author were to confirm his assumptions the argument would be more persuasive.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 82, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...author fails to make a convincing case. If the author were to confirm his assumpti...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'so', 'then', 'while', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.251592356688 0.25644967241 98% => OK
Verbs: 0.168789808917 0.15541462614 109% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0668789808917 0.0836205057962 80% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0382165605096 0.0520304965353 73% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0222929936306 0.0272364105082 82% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0987261146497 0.125424944231 79% => OK
Participles: 0.0254777070064 0.0416121511921 61% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.6645475217 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0222929936306 0.026700313972 83% => OK
Particles: 0.0031847133758 0.001811407834 176% => OK
Determiners: 0.114649681529 0.113004496875 101% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0382165605096 0.0255425247493 150% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0222929936306 0.0127820249294 174% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1696.0 2731.13054187 62% => OK
No of words: 273.0 446.07635468 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.21245421245 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.06481385082 4.57801047555 89% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.388278388278 0.378187486979 103% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.25641025641 0.287650121315 89% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.186813186813 0.208842608468 89% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.124542124542 0.135150697306 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6645475217 2.79052419416 95% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 207.018472906 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542124542125 0.469332199767 116% => OK
Word variations: 54.1498430586 52.1807786196 104% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0625 23.2022227129 74% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2741216784 57.7814097925 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 141.986410481 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0625 23.2022227129 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.625 0.724660767414 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 42.703525641 51.9672348444 82% => OK
Elegance: 1.63888888889 1.8405768891 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323447153539 0.441005458295 73% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.09645053304 0.135418324435 71% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0632777552587 0.0829849096947 76% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.580687668957 0.58762219726 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.138616185842 0.147661913831 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140953427628 0.193483328276 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710404097923 0.0970749176394 73% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.3606019014 0.42659136922 85% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.087215043489 0.0774707102158 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221227607078 0.312017818177 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582734703165 0.0698173142475 83% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.33743842365 60% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.87684729064 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.82512315271 83% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 6.46551724138 77% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 5.36822660099 130% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.82389162562 106% => OK
Total topic words: 15.0 14.657635468 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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More content wanted. For issue essays, around 450 words, for argument essays, around 400 words.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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