The following appeared as part of an article in a magazine devoted to regional life:“Corporations should look to the city of Helios when seeking new business opportunitiesor a new location. Even in the recent recession, Helios’s unemployment rate was

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The following appeared as part of an article in a magazine devoted to regional life:
“Corporations should look to the city of Helios when seeking new business opportunities
or a new location. Even in the recent recession, Helios’s unemployment rate was lower
than the regional average. It is the industrial center of the region, and historically it has
provided more than its share of the region’s manufacturing jobs. In addition, Helios is
attempting to expand its economic base by attracting companies that focus on research
and development of innovative technologies.”
Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.

The argument that Corporations should look to Helios City when desiring new business chances in a new location is not entirely logically convincing, because it ignores certain crucial assumptions.
Firstly, the argument assumes that Helios offers opportunities to companies but not all of them, because Helios is willing to attract companies that focus on research and development of innovative technologies. That desire made financial or food and beverages corporations which innovation level is low, out of scope of Helios. Secondly, the argument never addresses shortage of employee problem for businesses, even during recession period, unemployment rate was lower. New companies could face finding qualified employee in Helios in given low unemployment rates. For example, Helios is industrial center of region that doesn’t provide us enough data about numbers of employees in financial branch. Finally, the argument omits expenses of firms in Helios. Prices of rents, land fees or average salaries of workers isn’t given in argument that’s why the city could be expensive for small corporations. Thus, the argument is not completely sound. The evidence in support of conclusion, Author’s assumption based on unemployment statistics of Helios, but other determinants didn’t be provided by author. Corporations make a broad research before looking for new opportunities in the region to decide city of Helios is good location. Ultimately, the argument might have been weakened by given detailed reasons and evidence.

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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'look', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'thus', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.309090909091 0.25644967241 121% => OK
Verbs: 0.141818181818 0.15541462614 91% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0872727272727 0.0836205057962 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0472727272727 0.0520304965353 91% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0109090909091 0.0272364105082 40% => OK
Prepositions: 0.141818181818 0.125424944231 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0363636363636 0.0416121511921 87% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.09090730637 2.79052419416 111% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0145454545455 0.026700313972 54% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0472727272727 0.113004496875 42% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0145454545455 0.0255425247493 57% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0145454545455 0.0127820249294 114% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1812.0 2731.13054187 66% => OK
No of words: 229.0 446.07635468 51% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 7.91266375546 6.12365571057 129% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.57801047555 85% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.493449781659 0.378187486979 130% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.401746724891 0.287650121315 140% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.296943231441 0.208842608468 142% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.187772925764 0.135150697306 139% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09090730637 2.79052419416 111% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 207.018472906 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.633187772926 0.469332199767 135% => OK
Word variations: 67.2888186761 52.1807786196 129% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 20.039408867 60% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0833333333 23.2022227129 82% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.9793040194 57.7814097925 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.0 141.986410481 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0833333333 23.2022227129 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.916666666667 0.724660767414 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 5.14285714286 39% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 3.58251231527 140% => OK
Readability: 59.2580058224 51.9672348444 114% => OK
Elegance: 2.43636363636 1.8405768891 132% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.467337261253 0.441005458295 106% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0838539604484 0.135418324435 62% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0543983274019 0.0829849096947 66% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.473949876632 0.58762219726 81% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.189889261494 0.147661913831 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.193889431176 0.193483328276 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0809843440096 0.0970749176394 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.254796238644 0.42659136922 60% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0 0.0774707102158 0% => Paragraphs are so close to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.375743138669 0.312017818177 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478431994114 0.0698173142475 69% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.33743842365 36% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.87684729064 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 5.36822660099 149% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 11.0 14.657635468 75% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 41.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.5 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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