The following appeared in a memorandum from the human resources department ofDiversified Manufacturing:“Managers at our central office report that their employees tend to be most productive in the days immediately preceding a vacation. To help counterac

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The following appeared in a memorandum from the human resources department of
Diversified Manufacturing:
“Managers at our central office report that their employees tend to be most productive in the days immediately preceding a vacation. To help counteract our declining market share, we could increase the productivity of our professional staff members, who currently receive four weeks paid vacation a year, by limiting them to a maximum of one week’s continuous vacation time. They will thus take more vacation breaks during a year and give us more days of maximum productivity.”Discuss how well reasoned . . . etc.

The argument that replacing long a month vacation with a maximum 7 day vacation will increase productivity of staff that help to prevent current drop in the market share of company is not entirely logically convincing that it ignores certain crucial assumptions.

Firstly, argument assumes that many small vacations will rise productivity time that occurs after vacations can’t be accepted as a fact. Because decreasing time of vacations could led to unhappiness and not to relax as workers will. People want their vacation time to be length as more as possible. After a year hard work a week couldn’t be enough for them to relax and stress out their tiredness. For example, after a week, when employee back to work, it is possible to feel tiredness that never help board of company for their goals.

Secondly, the argument never addresses holidays during a year. Christmas or Ramadan is holy holidays that give workers more than a week vacation every year. Additionally, there are many national holidays that change by country, but give employees many free days during an entire year to relax which there are possible vacations that company can use for its productivity. For example, there are 10 days Ramadan, 7 days New Year eve’s and 10 days Nevruz holiday in Azerbaijan that there are enough to fill plans of board that would be efficient to companies to raise their production after them.

Thirdly, the Argument forgets opinions of employees. People mostly want to relax during the summers but if company divide them to 4 small vacations which one for every season. But it won’t be efficient for company, because people prefer some seasons as their best and want to go to a vacation during that time. For example, sending employee to vacation during autumn instead of long summer one, will make him or her unhappy rather to relax and being productive.

Finally, the argument omits data about that rise in productivity will solve market share problem of company. There are many determinant of lose in the market for companies. Author’s claimed that less productivity as cause of company’s share. It is impossible to decide or to come a conclusion that it is only reason. Actually, advertisements, quality of products and many things could be reason behind of loss. For example, bad quality or inefficient service could cause loss in competitive market versus their counterparts.

Thus, the argument is not completely sound.

The evidence in support of conclusion, the company should decide to use religious and national holidays as way to achieve their plans rather that dividing vacation of its workers.

Ultimately, the argument might have been weakened by flaws in given argument.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 186, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'lead'
Suggestion: lead
...ause decreasing time of vacations could led to unhappiness and not to relax as work...
^^^
Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: COMP_THAN[1]
Message: Comparison requires 'than', not 'then' nor 'as'.
Suggestion: than
...heir vacation time to be length as more as possible. After a year hard work a week...
^^
Line 9, column 125, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'determinants'?
Suggestion: determinants
...hare problem of company. There are many determinant of lose in the market for companies. Au...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'thus', 'for example']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.268101761252 0.25644967241 105% => OK
Verbs: 0.142857142857 0.15541462614 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0724070450098 0.0836205057962 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0489236790607 0.0520304965353 94% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0371819960861 0.0272364105082 137% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.127201565558 0.125424944231 101% => OK
Participles: 0.0215264187867 0.0416121511921 52% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75697755696 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Infinitives: 0.041095890411 0.026700313972 154% => OK
Particles: 0.00195694716243 0.001811407834 108% => OK
Determiners: 0.0528375733855 0.113004496875 47% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0254403131115 0.0255425247493 100% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0156555772994 0.0127820249294 122% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2736.0 2731.13054187 100% => OK
No of words: 444.0 446.07635468 100% => OK
Chars per words: 6.16216216216 6.12365571057 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.57801047555 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.371621621622 0.378187486979 98% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.288288288288 0.287650121315 100% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.213963963964 0.208842608468 102% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.114864864865 0.135150697306 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75697755696 2.79052419416 99% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 207.018472906 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497747747748 0.469332199767 106% => OK
Word variations: 56.2551801599 52.1807786196 108% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.039408867 115% => OK
Sentence length: 19.3043478261 23.2022227129 83% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.6637680418 57.7814097925 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.956521739 141.986410481 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 23.2022227129 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.565217391304 0.724660767414 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.14285714286 156% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.58251231527 84% => OK
Readability: 48.1331766549 51.9672348444 93% => OK
Elegance: 1.82051282051 1.8405768891 99% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.291824905546 0.441005458295 66% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.128152091073 0.135418324435 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0919472641602 0.0829849096947 111% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.570895870156 0.58762219726 97% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.231668437674 0.147661913831 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107835667497 0.193483328276 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0500195106352 0.0970749176394 52% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.179674162515 0.42659136922 42% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0957249005186 0.0774707102158 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169732689777 0.312017818177 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456989943471 0.0698173142475 65% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.33743842365 120% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.87684729064 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.82512315271 21% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 10.0 5.36822660099 186% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 19.0 14.657635468 130% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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