The following appeared as part of an article in the travel section of a newspaper:
“Over the past decade, the restaurant industry in the country of Spiessa has experienced unprecedented growth. This
surge can be expected to continue in the coming years, fueled by recent social changes: personal incomes are rising,
more leisure time is available, single-person households are more common, and people have a greater interest in
gourmet food, as evidenced by a proliferation of publications on the subject.”
The argument states that in the country of Spiessa, there has been high growth in the restaurant industry during the past ten years. The author concludes that the growth is expected to continue because of recent social changes. Stated in this way, the argument manipulates facts and conveys a distort meanings of the situation. It contains several flaws which will be evaluated through this essay.
To begin with, the author readily assumed that recent social changes such as rising personal income, higher leisure time, more single-person households and growing interest in gourmet food are correlated with the growth in restaurant industry. However, this is not necessarily true as no information has been provided that correlation between these changes and the restaurant industry exists. While those changes may firstly seem to be related with the industry growth, further thoughts reveal that the relationship are not always exists. To illustrate, people may spend their higher income on new technology available in the market. There is no evidence provided that they are going to spend money on food. Also, they can spend their leisure time exercising rather than eating. Similarly, single-person household can cook by themselves, and growing interest in gourmet may not contribute that much to the restaurant industry. Therefore, there is unsubstantial evidence to support the assumption in this argument. The argument could be strengthened if it had provided the information regarding correlation between recent social changes and the industry growth.
Second, the author assumes that the recent change will impact the restaurant industry in the coming years. Although there is correlation between the changes and the industry growth, this does not necessarily happen in this timeframe. For example, the effects may start immediately by increasing the industry growth to one point and stop growing, or it may take sometimes for the effect to take place in some point in the future. Without explicitly identify the evidences to this uncertainty, the argument is flawed. Further research must be conducted in order to study the effects of the social changes provided the reliable result.
Last, the author uses historical trend as another support for further growth in the future. However, this is again not necessarily true. The high growth in the past do not necessarily repeat itself in the future. For example, there may be a global economic crash in the future leading to crisis in the country. As a result of the crisis, the restaurant industry will be affected and the growth will be decreased.
The argument has several flaws as mentioned above. It fails to mention all collaborating factors to evaluate the argument. The improvement could be done by providing information regarding the correlation between the social changes and the restaurant industry growth in the country of Spiessa and the timing of the effects. Without these, the argument is supported by unsubstantial evidences and open to debate
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 292, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... argument manipulates facts and conveys a distort meanings of the situation. It contains ...
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Line 5, column 357, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put before the verb 'take'.
Suggestion: sometimes take
...o one point and stop growing, or it may take sometimes for the effect to take place in some po...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, similarly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, such as, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 28.8173652695 101% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2554.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 477.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35429769392 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67336384929 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7654367685 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.450733752621 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 782.1 705.55239521 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.471057884232 0% => OK
Article: 14.0 8.76447105788 160% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 19.7664670659 137% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.8473053892 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.9887264769 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5925925926 119.503703932 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6666666667 23.324526521 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.59259259259 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.180469439608 0.218282227539 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531087872087 0.0743258471296 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604204955975 0.0701772020484 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119189976697 0.128457276422 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0344875550224 0.0628817314937 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.3550499002 112% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.45 12.5979740519 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.1389221557 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.