The Following appeared on the Picasso School of Art website. Author drawn conclusion that, Picasso School of Art should be the premier choice for parents considering enrolling their child for art lessons, because many Picasso alumni have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional artists. In attempting to support argument author made several stated and unstated assumption which need evidence.
Firstly, Author state that Picasso School welcomes youngsters of age, there is no portfolio submission required to attend the school. Author assume that, parents would prefer school that has no quality criteria is concerned. This may not necessarily true, as it is possibility that, parents would want their children to go to best school. There might be several criteria for quality education which conduct by best school. This statement also suggest that, class size of Picasso School are large since they do not have any criteria for admission and allow every student to attend school. Bigger class size means teacher are giving less attention to each students. If this case true, parents would hardly make Picasso School their first choice, so argument weakens.
Secondly, author state that school offer instruction in nearly all styles and genres of art from drawing and painting to sculpture and photography. Author assume that, offering instruction in nearly all styles and genres will encourage student to more attentive towards art, so that they come up with new ideas. Author need to check, offering instruction in all style whether it really helpful for students to grow their knowledge of arts. It might be possibility that, because of bigger class size it’s not possible to teacher to check whether student really involved or not.
Thirdly, Author state that faculty includes some of the most distinguished artist in the area. Author assume that, because faculty include some distinguished artist, this makes this school the best school. It is possible that, artist might not be good at teaching. Being skilled and distinguished in certain field doesn’t ensure that the artist will teach well. Author assume that, youngster who admitted in Picasso School have gone on to become well-known and highly paid professional artists. It is not possible to apply to all class students, these successful student are born with inherent talent in terms of arts, he or she succeed in any way. It is quite possible to their own hard work and efforts contributed more to their success than facilities provided by the school. In such case, school take opportunity to take credit of it in order to attract more students.
In conclusion, author need to consider all point before making any conclusion. There are several stated and unstated assumption made by author which need evidence, so that argument become strengthen.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 13 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 455 350
No. of Characters: 2322 1500
No. of Different Words: 215 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.619 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.103 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.472 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 191 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 124 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.958 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.406 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.511 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 45, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...dly, Author state that faculty includes some of the most distinguished artist in the area. ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 630, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'succeeds'.
Suggestion: succeeds
...rent talent in terms of arts, he or she succeed in any way. It is quite possible to the...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 118, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'assumptions'?
Suggestion: assumptions
.... There are several stated and unstated assumption made by author which need evidence, so ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 55.5748502994 103% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2392.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 454.0 441.139720559 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26872246696 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61598047577 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52618494084 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482378854626 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 712.8 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.49463747 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.6666666667 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9166666667 23.324526521 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.45833333333 5.70786347227 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.387517501955 0.218282227539 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118961960668 0.0743258471296 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13297458635 0.0701772020484 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225072523348 0.128457276422 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.169446552738 0.0628817314937 269% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 98.500998004 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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