The following appears in a letter to the editor of the West Lansburg News:
A letter was shared to the editor of the West Lansburg news on the tufted groundhog lives in the coastal Westlands of West Lansburg. The letter stated the need to preserve the region’s biodiversity and ensure healthy environment by not allowing the road intended to be built across the edge of Westland to hold. The following argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily, the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that West Lansburg and the Neghboring Eastern Carpentria are the same because they have similar sanctuary, rendering its main conclusion that West lansburg council should not allow the road to be built invalid.
The argument fails to provide any justifications that the two areas are the same aside for the similarity that exist in the sanctuary. For one, the West Lansburg can indeed be different from Eastern Carpentria in terms of the texture of the soil, and the type or nature of the sea otter that resides there. The sea otter that is found in the West Lansburg, perhaps have the ability to tolerate anything built across the edges, which unlike the Eastern Carpentria, led to the wane of the otter sea in that area.
Had the argument provided information regarding the similarity of the otter sea that resides in both area, that could have perhaps made the conclusion solid. Even though, the argument would have to still delineate in what ways the otter sea are similar and with that could be intertwined to each other.
The argument also leaves many other unanswered questions. Even if the otter sea might be similar, the materials that will be used to construct the road along the edge of Wetlands might be disparate from that used by Eastern Carpentria, and as a result, the otter sea being able to withstand it and not leading to its decline. The materials to be used in construction plays a pivotal role, as the material could have contained substances that could have led to the death of some of the otter sea at Eastern Carpentria, which led to its population reduction.
Finally, the argument claims that similar regulations would exist on the use of the road that will be built along the edges of the Wetlands. Stringent rules might be promulgated that could impose restrain on the utilization of the road and hence, aid with the preservation of the otter sea. Perhaps, the road built along the Eastern Carpentria is being used anyhow, with little or no rules guiding its use, which might have led to the decline in the populace of otter sea there.
In conclusion, because the argument makes several unwarranted assumptions, it fails to make a convincing case that West Lansburg would encounter similar situation as that of Eastern carpentria and that precluding the building of the road would help to preserve the region’s biodiversity and ensure a healthy environment. To make the case stronger, the argument has to provide more information on the materials that will be used, the characteristics of the otter sea that resides in both area and ensure similar regulations would operate.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 513 350
No. of Characters: 2476 1500
No. of Different Words: 198 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.759 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.827 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.61 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 132 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.176 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.418 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.412 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.394 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.639 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rve the region’s biodiversity and ensure healthy environment by not allowing the ...
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Line 1, column 454, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ranted assumption that West Lansburg and the Neghboring Eastern Carpentria are t...
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Line 1, column 489, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...g and the Neghboring Eastern Carpentria are the same because they have similar s...
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Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat could be intertwined to each other. The argument also leaves many other unan...
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Line 7, column 474, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ces that could have led to the death of some of the otter sea at Eastern Carpentria, which ...
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Line 11, column 539, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sure similar regulations would operate.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, if, regarding, so, still, as to, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.9520958084 154% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2542.0 2260.96107784 112% => OK
No of words: 513.0 441.139720559 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95516569201 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75914943092 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69106261452 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 204.123752495 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.40350877193 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 787.5 705.55239521 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 16.0 8.76447105788 183% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.9953611599 57.8364921388 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.529411765 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.1764705882 23.324526521 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76470588235 5.70786347227 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132758236308 0.218282227539 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590552500592 0.0743258471296 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112470418296 0.0701772020484 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0830063366668 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126002166677 0.0628817314937 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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