The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
The argument that illegal immigrants who are entering into the country must be made them to return to their own country is not convincing and it is based on few unproven assumptions.
First the argument states if the immigrants whoever are entering into the country is not checked with the identity the economy will be endangered.But the author does not address the issue clearly and instead mentions if the identity is not checked which is ambiguous.Nowadays,major amount of checks are been done to cross check the identity with the invention and new enhancements in technology linking the details of a person with the identity.But if the country is failing to check the identity then there must be an alternate approach to check for it.Even though after the identity checks illegal immigrants have entered the country,government must be already in practise where because of the illegals the present harmony is not disturbed.
Second the argument mentions autonomy lies in the border which is exactly true.To maintain the autonomy government should be strict enough and think of new developments to eschew the illegals.Maintaining the clear check of each and every individual thoroughly which means the government must be smart enough to identify the unwanted.Although the editor states that the illegal may cause threat so he has to be returned to ones own country.Instead,he should be punished for deliberately doing the act.So that next whoever is planning to enter will be warned at their own risk.
The argument might have been strengthened if the editor clearly mentions about the threats the illegals are causing destroying the autonomy of the country.Also, the ways to check the identity of an immigrant and how are the precautions taken to safegaurd the illegal entry would eloborate the argument more.Because there are no supporting statements to the argument the given statement is weak.
Comments
e-rater score report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 319 350
No. of Characters: 1573 1500
No. of Different Words: 158 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.226 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.931 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 29 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 53.167 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 26.137 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.833 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.488 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.801 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.15 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 147, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...identity the economy will be endangered.But the author does not address the issue c...
^^^
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Nowadays
...ntity is not checked which is ambiguous.Nowadays,major amount of checks are been done to...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , major
... not checked which is ambiguous.Nowadays,major amount of checks are been done to cross...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 446, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...e details of a person with the identity.But if the country is failing to check the ...
^^^
Line 3, column 555, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Even
...e an alternate approach to check for it.Even though after the identity checks illega...
^^^^
Line 3, column 636, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , government
...egal immigrants have entered the country,government must be already in practise where becau...
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Line 5, column 80, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: To
...ies in the border which is exactly true.To maintain the autonomy government should...
^^
Line 5, column 193, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Maintaining
...new developments to eschew the illegals.Maintaining the clear check of each and every indiv...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Although
...e smart enough to identify the unwanted.Although the editor states that the illegal may ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 440, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Instead
... has to be returned to ones own country.Instead,he should be punished for deliberately ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 447, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , he
... be returned to ones own country.Instead,he should be punished for deliberately doi...
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Line 5, column 501, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...punished for deliberately doing the act.So that next whoever is planning to enter ...
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Line 5, column 501, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...punished for deliberately doing the act.So that next whoever is planning to enter will ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 156, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Also
... destroying the autonomy of the country.Also, the ways to check the identity of an i...
^^^^
Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Because
...entry would eloborate the argument more.Because there are no supporting statements to t...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...entry would eloborate the argument more.Because there are no supporting statements to t...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, then, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 55.5748502994 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 305.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25901639344 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25338762524 2.78398813304 117% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 204.123752495 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498360655738 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 495.0 705.55239521 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 76.0 22.8473053892 333% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 208.378711725 57.8364921388 360% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 401.0 119.503703932 336% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 76.25 23.324526521 327% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 12.5 5.70786347227 219% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.25449101796 305% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 8.20758483034 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319562240684 0.218282227539 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.198516135489 0.0743258471296 267% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0729166500094 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198516135489 0.128457276422 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729166500094 0.0628817314937 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 41.5 14.3799401198 289% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -5.66 48.3550499002 -12% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.1628742515 239% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.9 12.197005988 270% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.41 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.93 8.32208582834 131% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 12.3882235529 238% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 32.4 11.1389221557 291% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 33.0 11.9071856287 277% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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